struggles with the common app essay

Applying to College Common and Coalition Application
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<p>Hello everyone!
I need some help/advice regarding my common app essay.</p>

<p>I originally wanted to write about immigrating to America at the age of four, but that topic is so overused and cliche and it's difficult to make that unique to the reader. Therefore, I thought I would change my approach slightly. </p>

<p>First, I would focus my essay on the gradual decline of my Chinese ability and my loss of Chinese culture. Then, I would write the main part on my trip to China at the age of five. Basically, my parents put me on the plane with a close family friend and sent me back to my hometown for a two month vacation/immersion. I cried for a good week, but eventually had the most unique and exceptional time of my life. The trip had a huge effect on my identity today and I can recognize this because if I had not gone on the trip, I would have completely lost my connection to Chinese culture.</p>

<p>Is this a good idea, or is it still too borderline cliche? I need something strong and personal to write about, but if this idea is too overused, I can always go back to the drawing board. Please advise me. Thanks!</p>

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<p>I like it! Not many people would have had that same experience/will write about something like that even if they did.</p>

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<p>I like it too! And I think the way you write about can make it not cliche. I read that its not necessarily about the experience, but the lessons learned. So make sure the lesson is specific to you and couldn’t be applied to any other person in a similar situation, or one that has been overstated.</p>

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<p>bump! please help me~</p>

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<p>It’s a great idea. Not cliche, and definitely personal. Good luck!</p>

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<p>I say go for it! I’m kinda interested in the end result.</p>