Common App Essay: Cliche or interesting?

<p>Hi everyone,
If anyone would like to read my common app essay and provide me with feed back please let me know. Im applying to most of the Ivies and top universities so be as critical as you can. Your help is greatly appreciated. Also, please no rising seniors.<br>
Thanks</p>

<p>PM with title/prompt</p>

<p>PM me, I am going to be a rising junior (include the prompt too please)</p>

<p>I am a freshman in college, doing an internship right now and got a lot of time in my hands. Just helping people out, so PM me, I will be glad to read it and give a feedback.</p>

<p>Thanks for the responses, I PMed you all, please provide feedback as it would be greatly appreciated. Anyone else wanna take a look?</p>

<p>Sure, I’ll give feedback, PM me!</p>

<p>pm me I will see what I can do for you</p>

<p>send it over - ill critique it for you</p>