please help me with my commonapp essay

<p>Writing isn't my forte, and I would really appreciate it if someone would edit my essays and gives honest criticism. I actually wrote two essays on two different topics, though for the same commonapp prompt. I'm undecided as to which one to use (leaning a bit towards the first one), and I'm afraid both come off as a bit cliche. I prefer if you are not this year's applicant, I'm a bit paranoid. Thank you so much in advance.</p>

<p>I’ll take a look, PM the Prompt tho</p>

<p>PM with title/prompt.</p>

<p>sigh. why did you have to say your preference between the two. now we readers are biased.</p>

<p>anyways, PM me your essay! :)</p>

<p>Sure PM with prompt.</p>

<p>you’re welcome to PM me and i’ll give feedback, but i’m applying this year.</p>

<p>PM me, I’ll give you feedback!</p>

<p>I’ll give feedback, PM me!</p>

<p>thank for you those who replied. If anyone else would read it, I would be very grateful. I really would welcome more opinions. Thank you</p>