Common App essay topic, Korea

Hey CC, I just want to know your reaction on my topic

I chose #4 on the common app:
Describe a problem you’ve solved or a problem you’d like to solve. It can be an intellectual challenge, a research query, and ethical dilemma-anything that is of personal importance, no matter the scale. Explain its significance to you and what steps you took or could be taken to identify a solution.

Before I tell you about what I am going to write, let me briefly tell you about myself.

  • international student, from korea (south of course)
  • born and raised under a father who serves in the military ( he is an high-ranking officer)
  • for 18 years, i lived inside the military bases near DMZ (demilitarized zone) with the exception of a year, I even lived around JSA ( search it up if you don’t know)
  • So, i am really into this reunification of south and north korea

So, I am basically going to write it like this: (just a gist, not th actual essay)

This part is about how I came to wanting to solve the problem and significance to me.

  • In childhood, I was a kid who was jealous of my father’s job that require him to be at work instead of spending time with me
  • Tried to solve the problem of him spending more time with me, but later on figured out that it is more complicated than it appears to be
  • Realized the sophistication of north and south korea’s realtionship but felt strongly to solve this problem
  • Therfore, it’s resolution will not only mean that I’ll get to spend more time with my father but also mediate nation-level problems (human rights, world war 3 potential area, etc)

That sounds very interesting. I suppose you already applied, though.

great topic I think so. It will be very interesting if you have hook about the tension between North and South at the first sentence. I love to visit Korea some day. Good luck on your essay