<p>I've written my common app essay, and it's a topic of my own about how I met someone on IRC who was trying to trace his ancestry (and all he had was his great-grandmother's name, the decade she was born, and where she died), and how I helped him do that through the internet. It's a 600 word essay, but it doesn't say much about me, rather it details what I enjoy doing, and why I like helping random people a lot. I'm wondering whether I should choose a different topic, while I have time to rewrite? Something that talks more about me? Or would this topic do? My current essay is interesting and all, but I'm just not sure.</p>
<p>Just to clarify, the essay goes into considerable detail about how I think, and why I like analysis, etc., but that's all it says about 'me'. The rest is the story.</p>
<p>To give you an idea of the colleges I'm applying to, here are a few:
(Williams, Cornell, Northwestern, Brandeis)</p>
<p>Bump for great justice.</p>
<p>If you think it’s really good, then keep it. Maybe try to show more of your personality in your other essays? I think the fact that you’re writing about someone else kind of illustrates that you like to help people.</p>
<p>I think it sounds really interesting, makes me want to read it!</p>
<p>Thank you for replying shimmshaw. There’s an “elaborate on your ec’s essay” in which I can’t really talk about myself. Then there’s the above one. And there’s the “why this college”. And finally there’s the additional info section. I’m trying to use that to talk about myself as much as possible, I don’t know if that’s enough, though.</p>
<p>Thanks for your feedback, Concerto. I appreciate it. =D</p>
<p>pm me ur essay, i critique yours if ud do the same for me!</p>
<p>onhcetum: I’ll critique yours anyway. PM me.</p>
<p>Maybe cut the other persons story down a few chunks and instead focus on yourself, and draw out more about what you discovered about yourself from the experience (your desire to help others, your curiosity?)</p>
<p>Yes, that seems like a good idea, Concerto. I think my essay is focused too much on the story right now. Will work on it a bit more. Thank you.</p>
<p>Any other suggestions? Particularly about the topic itself, and whether it should be changed?</p>
<p>My final bump, before I go to sleep. =)</p>
<p>And another one. Just one or two opinions more. =)</p>
<p>A police officer saw a car speeding down the highway.
He started chasing after the speeder . When he got close he’s saw it was a blonde woman who was actually knitting while driving.
The cop yelled, “Pull over!”
The blonde shouted back, “No! It’s a sweater!”</p>
<p><em>bump</em> ?</p>