Common App Transfer Essay

<p>I am looking to transfer to some highly prestigious schools and wrote my essay for the common app. If you guys could take a look at it and give me some insight I’d greatly appreciate it! Be as harsh as you want and point out errors! </p>

<p>Thanks! </p>

<p>“Scott, you’re going to be that guy who works at McDonald’s after high school, if you even make it that far.” Those are words from my 10th grade chemistry teacher. Yes, I was that kid who is very intelligent but lazy, unmotivated, and unwilling to listen to the warnings from others. Those words to this day still motivate me, they drive me to be successful and do things not one person in my life thought I could. To others my life was looked at as a joke just trying to get by one day at a time: no goals, no worries, and no desire to change. After my sophomore year in high school I decided that it was time for change. My junior year GPA was 3.6 and senior year it was 3.9, with my GPA still not being the best and wanting to run collegiately, I decided to attend North Iowa Area Community College. I am currently a psychology major who runs cross country and track wanting to transfer to a prestigious institute that will push me academically and help me become enlightened as an individual.<br>
As I already stated, I am a runner, how do people usually view that as? That one likes to run for no apparent reason. To me running has changed my life; it has given me motivation and a new outlook on life. My goals after transferring are to continue my academic and athlete success at a higher level, a level that is well respected and will help me pursue my future aspirations. I hope to major in psychology and obtain my masters to become a secondary school counselor. Reasoning behind my academic goals is I want to be able to help the youth succeed and not have to go through what I did. I don’t want the next generation of youth to struggle through life, not knowing what’s next in life, not having a plan or reason to care about life. With my experiences and knowledge I can help create a lifelong impact on others.<br>
Washington University in St. Louis would be the perfect school that would push me academically and enlighten me through creativeness, diverseness, and the prestigious College of Arts and Science. Academic integrity is important to me and my willingness, motivation to learn, and intelligence will help me succeed. Failure is not an option and I understand that things don’t come easy, but my experiences have shaped me and helped me overcome stressful events, events such I’ll face at Washington University in St. Louis</p>

<p>Bump!
I know it’s a lot to read and give me a thought but please help me out!</p>

<p>Not the worst I have read but still weak. Running has changed my life… okay good… it has give me motivations… okay good… how so? You need more example and stuff you have actually done in life.</p>