<p>I was disappointed that my previous thread about "US military transfers" received many views, yet insufficient replies: I hope the outcome of this one will not end in the same manor.</p>
<p>Here is my transfer essay; however, be forewarned, it has hastily proofread: ** please ** base your criticism on the content of the piece, not grammar; it will be ironed out later.</p>
<p>Try and not be a man of success, but a man of value Albert Einstein</p>
<p>A goal, a principal, an ideal that, until recently, never understood and was consequently ignored. As I graduated from high school, completed an internship and when into college, my primary goal and guiding principle gradually shifted: this principle has become crucial in the governance of my behaviorof my choices. </p>
<p>My high school experience and mindset can be described as a typical for a student planning to attend college: take relatively rigorous courses, do well in those classes and participate in extracurricular activates. I must unfortunately admit, when performing these task on some occasions, simply went through the motions in order to do well and put them in my application: I really never knew the significance or attempted to know the significance of what I was doing. I would simply attend and log in the hours to simply add them into my transcript; my essays suffered as a consequence. My sophomoric and apathetic attitude became evident when 7 out of the 8 college applications I set out resulted in rejection. </p>
<p>Interesting changes in prospective and attitude begun to occur when I graduated from high school and when on and became a college sophomore. My overall optimism, ethic, unrelenting persistence and analytical mindset remained unchangedmy foundational goal did. What triggered this revision, whether it be my independence, my self scrutiny, classes I took, conversations with others, observations of my environment and those around me, I do not know. What I do know are the effects: faith has played a more significant role, participating in activities that I regard with sincerity and influencing one of the most significant decision I have made, of which I am most proud of.</p>
<p>I am not a top student, a stellar athlete, a musical prodigy, nor the most gregarious and studious: this is obvious when reviewing my standardized test scores, extracurricular activates and my relatively disappointing 2 semester GPA; I make no excuses about it, I could have worked harder. As I have done in the past with the SAT and performance in college courses, I will progressively improve. What is questionable; however, just as it was in the SAT with effort and numerous times I retook it, if I will improve in within a timeframe to the satisfaction of othersof myself. </p>
<p>With each progressive year, I have always uped up the ante in regards to difficulties and in goals in order to remedy my faults. The duty and I service I will perform in the upcoming months and years, I hope, will make me a better a better adult, a better Catholica better American. When I was a child, I recall once saying to my father Dad, I just want to be like you. Utterly surprised, my father replied sternly, No! Son, I dont care what you do with your life or how much money you make: I want you to be better then me; if you are not and you become just like me or worse, I have failed as a father.: since then, and especially now, I have trying to live up to that expectation. </p>
<p>As previous experiences in classroom performance, comparisons in achievement between myself and peers, performance in standardized tests and in the outcomes in the application process, I may improve, but may never be successful to the absolute level to my satisfaction: it is unquestionable; however, that I will be diligent and unflinching in the pursuit and eventual outcome in being the man of what my father expects of what I expect.</p>