Complete BS essay...want to grade?

<p>I BSed this thing. But tell me what you think of my rambling, garrulous writing style.</p>

<p>Prompt: Do you think that ease does not challenge us and that we need adversity to help us discover who we are? Plan and write an essay...blah blah blah</p>

<p>Adversity certainly strengthens us and allows us to discover who we are. If it weren't for tumultuous times, we would have no reason to improve ourselves; we would be absolutely complacent
I can use myself and thus empirical evidence to illustrate this point. In my life, I have been through many difficult times. Years ago I was diagnosed with moderate to severe obsessive-compulsive disorder, as well as a few other related afflictions. It became difficult for me to attend school due to these ailments; however, I remained tenacious and determined. I would not brook my emotional vagaries, and in the end persevered by staying in school in spite of the tremendous pain. I attended clubs and the like in open defiance of my social anxiety disorder, determined to succeed. Ultimately, my disorders taught me to work with diligence and assiduousness. They helped me cultivate my inner qualities
A second, perhaps less abstract example would be the historical Great Depression. The Great Depression was obviously an arduous time in American (and world) history. However, in the end, America's economy emerged strengthened and institutions were put in place to make sure a similar catastrophe would not occur in the foreseeable future. This is a much grander example of growth through adversity. America became cognizant of the pathologies that plagued her economy due to hardship, and went into search and destroy mode, rooting them out and eliminating them.
A third example would be the evolutionary process of natural selection. In times of interspecies (or intraspecies) conflict the weak are rooted out and eliminated. The same applies to climate issues. Humanity, in its current state, would not exist had it not been for adversity. Collectively, organisms are improved by difficulties. What better example than nature itself?</p>

<p>Yeah...I probably should have developed my points more thoroughly. Had I done that...what do you think?</p>

<p>I actually like your essay. I believe it would receive either a 9 or 10. Your ideas are fine. You did a good job structuring your sentences. You should try your best to write a conclusion. Overall you did a fair well job. :)</p>

<p>Anyone else?
I think I’ll probably do better on the ACTUAL essay…</p>