Cornell CAS Essay

<p>Now that we're all done with applications for this year, I'm putting this up here so that I could get comments while waiting (very long) to hear back from Cornell. Be brutal if you have to, and bear in mind that I can't change anything at this point.</p>

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Describe your intellectual interests, their evolution, and what makes them exciting to you. Tell us how you will utilize the academic programs in the College of Arts and Sciences to further explore your interests, intended major, or field of study.</p>

<p>Growing up in a political family and in the company of peers who thought deep and hard about economic, political and sociocultural issues, it was hard to remain a stranger to the social sciences. I started out as a history buff, addicted to stories and accounts of the past. My ‘gift’ was an ability to absorb historical texts as if they were novels, each account as vivid and poignant as that last scene in Salinger’s Catcher in the Rye. This, I later realized, was also my affliction. </p>

<p>I was a consummate fool. History had been my gateway to concepts such as capitalism, justice, democracy, communism, imperialism, secularism and nationalism. But I was so given to the view that history was just another epic work of literature, a story for the ages, that I failed to see how any of these concepts related to the quotidian realities I saw around me. I was breaking the cardinal rule of the social sciences by closing my eyes to the world in my eagerness to understand the ideas that governed it.</p>

<p>Like any other evolutionary process, change has come slowly to my understanding of the social sciences. But it is this staggered courtship that has made the social sciences exciting to me. I’ve had many eureka moments (sans the naked old men dancing in the streets), powerful instances when I’ve learned just how much we can understand about our societies with a knowledge of subjects such as history, economics, politics and sociology. But I will not make sweeping statements claiming to have captured the essence of the social sciences; indeed, there is no panacea that will resolve the breadth of our ignorance in its entirety.</p>

<p>In biology, the term ‘perfection’ doesn’t exist in the dictionary of evolution. The same is true of my intellectual passions. I remain adrift in the bazaar of ideas, and like any sane shopper, I’m certain that I will not leave with exactly the items on my shopping list. As a student at the College of Arts and Sciences, I will concentrate on disciplines that have intrigued me for a long time – particularly, history, economics and government – but not at the expense of the wealth of opportunities that I will find at Cornell.</p>

<p>In high school, I took a class in game theory and for the first time, I realized how closely the mathematics was intertwined with the social sciences. One concern that stayed with me during my college search was how I could factor my interest in mathematics, science and technology into my college education. Cornell’s program in Science & Technology Studies provides a unique solution, with classes such as ‘From Surgery to Simulation’ that marry science and technology with my passion for the social sciences. </p>

<p>Having lived my entire life in a capital city (Singapore), I’ve seen how commerce, governance and culture can interact at close quarters. The Cornell in Washington program at the College of Arts & Sciences will extend my appreciation of the way policy-making instruments function in the world’s most powerful capital. The social sciences are, and will always be, disciplines that are pegged to real-world affairs and I can think of no better city than Washington DC where I will benefit from immersing myself in the heart of the action. </p>

<p>These programs are innovative and exciting additions to a comprehensive liberal arts education, but ultimately they do not overshadow a larger point: at the College of Arts & Sciences, I can find anything – from generous research funding to ample opportunities to study abroad - that would conceivably benefit my collegiate experience, and feel safe in the knowledge that I am in the most experienced, knowledgeable and doting hands. </p>

<p>Attending Cornell is not only about the four years I’ll spend taking advantage of these endless opportunities; it is also about the lifetime I’ll spend in the world. And I know that my time at the College of Arts & Sciences will prepare me well to be a productive, cosmopolitan and civic-minded member of any community I choose to become a part of.

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<p>I don’t think it was too smart to post your essay here. There are some lame people who would want to steal your idea/concept. Even if its too late for someone to submit their app, who’s to say that a junior wouldn’t decide to use this essay for their app in the fall?</p>

<p>It seems bombastic; too many big words for what you were trying to say.</p>

<p>Take up poetry. That’s what I did :cool:</p>

<p>@Haha I win:
I don’t care if they do. In the case of that hypothetical junior, it would be pretty lamentable that given one chance to say something about himself he chooses to use someone else’s idea/concept. And if they would’ve chosen it anyway, then there’s no problem to begin with is there? And lastly if it gave that hypothetical junior a nudge in the right direction, then why should I feel bad about that?</p>

<p>@mathsciencedude:
I am a poet.</p>

<p>I liked it!</p>

<p>You are a poet?
I didn’t know it,
but you definitely showed it.</p>

<p>Even by another name a rose is still a rose.
However, I still must say that poetry is not prose.</p>

<p>Every time I read your prose, I let out a large sigh.
So posters quit posting, and let this thread die.</p>

<p>By the way, I am a hippopotamonstrosesquipedaliaphobe.</p>

<p>“Please respond to the essay question below (maximum of 500 words)…”</p>

<p>677 words is notably greater than 500, but I’m not qualified to say it will actually make much of a difference.</p>

<p>Certainly a perfect piece of writing in terms of style, vocabulary, use of metaphors, etc.</p>

<p>But, honestly, I found it to be very boring (and much too long).</p>

<p>really great writing style, but I felt it was too broad (if it is possible to be that way). Cornell adcoms want to see some focus in certain activities, possibly how you came to develop those interests; you seem to say that you’re interested in everything from political science to economics to math to history and everything in between. It’s good you were specific about the A&S school, and the fact that your writing style is awesome will probably help you (ESPECIALLY imagery) but I would shorten your writing to make it a BIT less wordy and more focused on one or two areas, as well as how they connect to liberal arts.</p>

<p>The “broad” angle might work since you’re applying to a liberal arts college…adcoms want to know that you have a wide range of interests and will take advantage of the flexible curriculum, etc.</p>

<p>wow, thats sort of the angle i went with… explaining my interest in a variety of different areas and how I want to be able to learn about the world. I incorporated Ezra Cornell’s quote in there somewhere but it was a bit cheesy haha.</p>

<p>yeah I know incorporating his quote is cheesy but I think it’s a good idea - it shows the adcoms that you actually took the time to look up and learn more about Cornell rather than simply submitting the same thing that you did to other colleges…</p>

<p>I’m not saying here that you should write about one focus, but I feel like just writing how you are interested in everything isn’t a great idea either - they want to see that you have some specific interests (which you can elaborate on) and want to learn more about the world</p>

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<p>Which is all true, but considerably hard to do within 500 words (at least, it was for me).</p>

<p>Excellent essay, but one of the goals of a word limit is to show how well you can express yourself concisely. Either way, I don’t think it’ll affect you with writing of this caliber.</p>