could anybody take a look at my "how-you-spent-the-last-two-summers" essay

<p>yh, thread name says it all, it is for princeton.
welcome all suggestions etc. plus, please esp look at the form, is this what ppl write ( i was not sure what they wanted, like an essay, or just a description, or a list or whatever -.-)
thank you for any responses!!!
(i´d like to pm it to you, so you dont have to leave any e-mail ads)</p>

<p>bumppp, please i am an international ESL and REALLY need help…</p>

<p>You can sent it over. I will critique it.</p>

<p>send*…sorry</p>

<p>sure! go ahead and send it to me</p>

<p>I will have a look over it if you want</p>

<p>okay, thanks guys, but i am getting paranoid because two of the people that i sent it have not responded… i rather not send it around anymore… dont wanna get it stolen… then again, who THE F*** should steal a summer essay, which is basically a mere description of my actions, they would wanna steal my actions and there i can only say: bad luck guys, i am a radical, politically active leftist who HAS BEEN ARRESTED
so think twice before stealing my summer activities
ps. this is not a lie</p>