Could somebody please review my University of Southern California paragraph?

College Essays
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<p>It is only a short paragraph! Thank you!</p>

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<p>i can look at it</p>

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<p>great! DM’d it to you</p>

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<p>Ill help send me it :)</p>

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<p>Send it over if you want.</p>

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<p>I can help polishing your essay, feel free to pm me.</p>

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<p>Sure!! Just PM me!!</p>