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<p>Essay topic: Do you think that ease does not challenge us that we need adversity to help us discover who we are?
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2. Oprah Winfrey who has a bad childhood but she has the experience of poor people.
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As we all know, lots of people may face difficulties or frustrations in their lives. In fact, these failures or disappointments are the treasure for people to find out their potential and help them to realize who they are. Of course, if people all live their lives in ease ways, people aren’t be motivated to become better. We do need the adversity to warn us that we should be appreciate to what they get and learn the experience from every failed trail. Thomas Edison failed so many times that he couldn’t even count them, but he invented one of the most significant devices-light bulbs which can provide light for people. And Oprah Winfrey learned the adversity experience from her childhood and she developed her personality to understand other people better.
Adversity can aid us to find out how much we still need to improve in order to reach our goals, thus we need to face the difficulties bravely and fix the problem to be successful. Thomas Edison was one of the most well-known scientists who invented the light bulbs for people. It took him a long time to try to invent this device; even though he tried many times, he still couldn’t make it. However, he didn’t give up because of many failures. He found out the reason why he didn’t succeed and learned the experience from every trail in order to be well-prepared for his next trail. The adversity encouraged him to keep trying and never give up. He didn’t afraid of the difficulties or problems which he was facing, moreover he regarded these troubles as the reason to be succeeded. If he just gave up when he face the failures for the first time, we might still live in the dark world now. His adversity not only brings the bright light to the whole world but also achieved his motives. Everyone will face adversity in his or her life, and the only difference between losers and winners is that winners treat adversity as the ways toward succeed but losers regard difficulties as the stones which prevent them from achieving success.
Adversity can help people to have better understandings of life and themselves by building their own values and beliefs. Orphan Winfrey is regard as the richest African American women in the world and she is one of the most generous philanthropists known to man. Without having a lovely childhood, she was born in a single parent family and her mother didn’t give her too much attention and love. She was raped by age of 9 and got pregnant at 14, moreover her baby died infancy. Growing up in poverty, she understands the lives of poor people. Even all these adversity don’t stop her from being successful, she loves talking to other people and she becomes the host at her local high school station. People start to realize her potential and promoted her to be an anchor on the local news channel at age of 19. She later converted to the host of a talk programme and she developed her own talk show which is called Orphan Winfrey talk show. Helping other people and donating money to the poor people to support them to get education and better living conditions. From her talk show which has large amount of audience, she is always optimistic about her life even though she was lived in a dark one when she was young. She encourages people to not be pessimistic when they face the adversity; the lives are controlled by us. Adversity challenge people to change their lives and promote them to be better, after defeating the problems people may develop a new way of looking their lives.
Hardship is the gift for people to find their ways of live and inspire them to learn the knowledge of failures. People can gain benefit by learning the past and they are able to reach their goals by correcting their mistakes. Others can be tougher after what they have been through all the failures and these people will be more brave to face their lives in a positive way. </p>

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<li><p>Edison’s failure to perfect the lightbulb time after time is a poor example of adversity. Further, you have not discussed any personal character development that followed his discovery.</p></li>
<li><p>You go immediately from Oprah’s adversity to her success without showing how the adversity LED to her success. The essay is about explaining the relationship between adversity and what follows.</p></li>
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