critique my common app essay

College Essays
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<p>Hi everyone, I just finished the first draft and I'd like some of your opinions on it, constructive criticism is welcome and pm me if you'd like to read it. Thanks</p>

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<p>Sure. Feel free to pm me. I'll help.</p>

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<p>sure pm it</p>

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<p>I'll read it.</p>

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<p>i'll be glad to help as well</p>

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<p>If you need another opinion, PM me.</p>

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<p>I will read it</p>

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<p>ill read it.
<a href="mailto:timmy16263@gmail.com">timmy16263@gmail.com</a>
or PM me :D</p>

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<p>Sure, PM it to me!</p>