Critique my CommonApp essay?

<p>Prompt #1
Topic: My bicultural background
Word Count: 648</p>

<p>I would appreciate it if anyone could read over and critique my essay. Please inform me if it answers the prompt or if the content is not clear enough. Give me any suggestions, criticisms, and corrections! </p>

<p>Thanks in advance.</p>

<p>Preferably readers who isn’t a new member on this forum and had experience reading other people’s essay!</p>

<p>I will! I’ve read hundreds of essays–I’m a counselor. PM em.</p>

<p>My little sister is also applying to college and I’m helping her out, so I have a lot of insight.</p>

<p>I like essays! PM me if you want</p>

<p>Bump. Looking for few more readers!</p>

<p>Hey I can review your essay.</p>

<p>I’m happy to read through it! PM me</p>

<p>If you still need help, I would love to help out!</p>

<p>I’d be happy to read it! PM me!
I haven’t yet put my ideas for the essay onto paper, but I’d edited and given suggestions for about a half a dozen of my friends already for their Common App essay! I feel like I’m quite the critique-r!</p>