<p>So, I have a 500 word personal statement to write. My thoughts are of course to work my own voice in, really make it ME. So, I sat down and thought about what I did a lot of during high school. I came up with band, and community service. I also realized that my school band experience was actually my catalyst into community service, so I thought I might give some sort of short anecdote on that. I'm sort of in the middle of the first draft and want some thoughts if anyone has them. I started the essay with a detailed description of getting to my before school jazz band class late and playing an improv solo. From there I talk about how music has been a passion for me, and then I was going to lead into how it started me on community service. So, it seems like it will be 2 short specific anecdotes sort of linked together. Does this sound like it has potential? Any constructive thoughts would be appreciated.
Thanks!</p>
<p>I'll be happy to read the answer and give you feedback</p>
<p>Write about something that you are attached to; the college admissions officers are looking for honesty, and "your voice". Read "Dove of Peace's" essay writing post, it'll be helpful</p>
<p>Absolutely.... think deeply not abt the essay in focus and college in mind but only the topic and experiences . see and understand what u feel was most important to you in retrospect .. then describe it in words... Speak form the hearts. after u are done. then do the ornamentation and editing of language to refine the thoughts properly.......</p>
<p>Yes, I read that essay post zeningchen, and "Write about something that you are attached to" is exactly what I was trying to do. I have been involved with jazz band since 8th grade (an anomaly in this band because it's a high school band). The band experience in general also changed me in the long run, so that's something else I want to bring out. I'm just worried that the topic is a bit too normal, not unique, etc.</p>