<p>Hi guys this is my Common Application central essay can you give me some feedback I am applying to Harvard, Duke, Cornell, Princeton, Stanford, Yale, Dartmouth, Brown and UPenn etc. Looking for lots of money and applying as an international student. Really want to get out of Pakistan, haha. I worked strenuously on this writing please read it for me:</p>
<p>I don't accept chaos. I find solitude in order, I don't consider the bombastic to be trustable, I find those who rely on imagination more than necessary to be weak of personalilty, to themselves be a creation of their own mind, a facade they wear to hide away from the world. To hide away from the pain, to placate it with the nonsensical and devise it as futile, building it as a emotion not reliable, one they're imagination cannot be focused on, because they spend too much time diverting focus to the whispers of their heart. A heart that beats to the fleeting moments of time, that they try so hard to capture.</p>
<p>I despise the calm. I find it to be baseless. A structure built in the sky of realists. Realists that fail to grasp the ground, yet proclaim to be standing so firmly upon it. They promise that they see all with a true eye. A vision that relies on balance of life. A life that centuries of realists has imposed on one another. A life that comes of a balance. A balance of the practical to the impossible. A balance that sadly for them is misaligned. A balance they consider even, yet is as close to opposite as they are to those who imagine. They rely on the brain, the compact brain that compacts them.</p>
<p>This world however relies on a true balance. One a ratio of equality of these two. I, however don't consider one to exist. I ,who am chaos, with healing scars, and red eyes from moments of reality. I, who am calm, due to the complete disorder of my thoughts, who believes in the moment to supply a never ending sedation of happiness. I, whose heart beats to structure. I, whose mind is stigmatized by activity. I, who, am human.</p>