Critique my Yale supplemental essay?

<p>The prompt is basically write about something so that the committee can learn something about you that isn't otherwise reflected elsewhere in your application.</p>

<p>I had someone read this essay and they completely didn't get it, whereas I thought that the message was quite clear. I need other critiques just to make sure that I'm not crazy here. </p>

<p>I'll PM the essay. P.S. I'm a transfer student. </p>

<p>I’ll view it. I promise I’ll be honest, but not deprecating. :slight_smile: </p>

<p>Sure, I’ll take a look at it.</p>

<p>okay, I’m curious. Is it too late to do anything about it?</p>

<p>If it’s the same essay I read then ya It didn’t make any sense. </p>

<p>I’ll read it</p>

<p>I’ll read it if you still want feedback. :)</p>

<p>I’ll read it if you still want feedback. :)</p>

<p>i ll read it if you still want feedback :)</p>