Will someone please give me honest feeback on my Yale Supplemental Essay?

<p>I just wrote it last night. The essay prompt is really open-ended so I didn't really know where to start. Please let me know if this will cut it. </p>

<p>I'd prefer it to be read by parents</p>

<p>Thank you in advance.</p>

<p>BUMP? Anyone?</p>

<p>i can read</p>

<p>parent here, can read.</p>

<p>I can read. </p>

<p>I’ll give it a shot.</p>