Diversity and Why? Essays. Please Critique!

<p>hi im applying to UMich- Ann Arbor, and was wonder if anyone would be willing to read my essays.
I'm worried about both my essays sounding very cliche.</p>

<p>constructive feedback would be highly appreciated.</p>

<p>Hey, I'm the Newspaper Editor at my school.
I'd be willing to read it over if you'd like.</p>

<p>I'm in the same predicament as you, dthizz.</p>

<p>sure ill read ...it pm me</p>

<p>I'm not applying to UMich so any of you that want to PM it my way, I wouldn't mind giving it a read-through.</p>

<p>hey ill read your essay</p>

<p>I'll read it. PM me</p>

<p>sure I'll read, I already sent in my UofM essay..which school are you applying to?</p>

<p>Actually things on my list have just changed. I AM in fact applying to UMich.</p>

<p>I'd still be willing to read it over for you if you'd like, but seeing as my own is currently in the works, you may feel otherwise.</p>

<p>It has to be a well constucted essay, U mich is very selective. PM me</p>

<p>Sure, I'll give a shot. PM me.</p>

<p>ill read it, pm me</p>