Do I need an essay coach?

<p>Reaching for Stanford and UC Berkeley as a mech engineering major.</p>

<p>ACADEMICS: My academics are great, but not competitive. (3.9 unweighted GPA, 2110 1st SAT planning on retake for 2250~, 730's on W History and Math II)</p>

<p>EC'S: I'm pretty involved in Christian club (4 years, VP 2 years) and Robotics (2 years) and have gone to 2 NASA summer camps.</p>

<p>My unique characteristic lies in hobbies: I have a passion to tinker, make, and hack stuff... from air rifles to R/C to woodworking to bikes to odds and ends... and I'm pretty gifted in the arts (piano improv and graphic design). Getting into photography. And I've done each with all my heart. As such, I've had a few serious medical conditions lately that have really had an impact on my passions. But all of that is outside of school (not your typical EC's).</p>

<p>I'm a strong writer, can write a genuine and as a thoughtful individual can pick out my passions and motivations and how each have shaped me.</p>

<p>BUT --- I don't know what's appealing to the admissions officers --
(lines to not cross, topics to not cover, appealing formations, choices of detail, attractive qualities)</p>

<p>I know Stanford really looks for an impassioned individual, but know nothing past that. I have a few close friends, outstanding individuals and graduates from Stanford and MIT, and a guidance counselor (doesn't necessarily know admissions)
but is their help alone enough?</p>

<p>If not, any rec's for good college essay coaches in the South SF Bay area? I know of a few highly acclaimed ones, but they charge anywhere from $100 to $400 an hour and though my dad's okay with it I know the strain on his pocketbook is a lot.</p>

<p>What about books on the personal statement?</p>

<p>Pointers PLEASE!!!</p>

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<p>You’re looking at it in the wrong way: they’re waiting for you to tell them what’s appealing to you. Besides being positive, mature, I think the only major task you need to accomplish is just to stand out through your essay, whether that is through some unique perspective or humor or some other quality of yours that can shine through the paper.</p>

<p>I don’t know why anyone would ever pay so much to let someone read and criticize something that can potentially be so personal and private… Essay books out there are great, especially sample writings. English teachers who know you well are also great resources.</p>

<p>True, but for all I know I could be rambling on about something that to me might seem important but to the admissions officers be boring, trivial, not the best topic to write about, etc. I’m sure each person has an amazing story to share, but the problem is what is amazing to the admissions. Of course, the most important aspect of the essay is letting my personality shine through, but what I like to talk about might not be the most preferable (or strongest, most memorable) of stories in me to them.
I don’t know how much sense that makes, and it isn’t that I would be making up a story, but as I see it a coach would help me pick out the best story on the shelf in the officer’s eyes…? I’m sure a book would help for that, but can someone clarify?</p>

<p>smerdy, what you might do is google in your area SAT essay writing workshops. My son did a single day one in August last year ran by an English teacher whose has been doing this for years. She helped him focus and create an essay that really represented him. I know he was very pleased with the result.</p>

<p>Thanks for the input, but I don’t know how much an SAT-specific essay workshop would help me… (I did get a 12 on the essay) I do creative writing occasionally and I think such a timed essay environment would not produce the same reflection of self as a weeks-polished personal statement.</p>

<p>Sounds like you don’t need help then, but I disagree on the time part. Sometimes one’s best work is something poured out in a rush of enthusiasm. Good luck!</p>

<p>Yeah, I can agree with that, haha! Thanks.
Has anyone had comparative experience with a college admissions counselor/essay coach/book?</p>

<p>A good essay coach can be extremely helpful. Having someone who doesn’t know you read your essay is great idea, of course, as many on CC know. But an experienced essay coach can also guide you in HOW to help your essay reflect well on yourself.</p>

<p>Smerdy- I’m a professional essay coach, so maybe I can give you some idea of what a good one can do for you. (And by the way, thanks to the miracles of Skype, googledocs, email, etc., you need not find an essay coach in your area. I’ve worked with many kids I’ve never even met face-to-face.)</p>

<p>While almost any experience, observation, etc. can serve as a jumping off point for a great essay, there are, as you suggest, some topics that are better avoided, because they are too controversial, might reflect poorly on you, or are overused. An essay coach can definitely help steer you a bit when it comes to those sorts of questions. A more important topic-related question might be “What does the story I choose to tell IMPLY about me?” In other words, what is your essay’s “subtext”? Again, an outside reader with experience can often shed light on how your essay might be interpreted at a deeper level. For example, one student I worked with wrote her main Common App essay about a comic series of mishaps at a beloved internship. (Not going to get more specific, as I want to protect her privacy.) The essay was definitely an entertaining read, laugh-out-loud-funny, but there was also an unstated message. The student came across as someone who persevered through the mishaps, never giving up on her task, no matter how ridiculous the situation became (although, of course, she never stated anything like that directly). Her love for the internship came through, as did her dogged determination and refusal to be discouraged. Nice subtext. Of course, when she initially told me the story, she had only thought of it as a funny series of events, which it was, but having an experienced outside reader allowed her to understand how her story might be interpreted on a deeper level.</p>

<p>An essay coach can be helpful with supplemental essays, as well. In my experience, many students do dot fully appreciate the importance of the “Why do you want to go to X College?” essay that appears on many supplements. This essay should be utterly truthful, but can be challenging to write, and doing it well may actually require significant research. An experienced coach can direct you as to what kinds of specifics schools are looking for from you when you answer this question.</p>

<p>A good essay coach has read and critiqued hundreds of essays and has a sense of what does and does not appeal to admissions committees in general. A good essay coach will provide references with those s/he has worked with in the past. A really good essay coach will feel like an ally throughout the essay writing process, but will never actually put a hand in any of your essays. I describe the way I work this way: I might say “Can you think of a more descriptive word to use here?” but I would never suggest a specific word. It is important that all your work be your own, but that doesn’t mean you shouldn’t have guidance.</p>

<p>English teachers and family members can be helpful as well, but be careful. Some (not all!) English teachers can get too caught up in the formal aspects of the writing; they may pay more attention to structure and grammar than to how your essay will strike a reader who does not know you. Beware losing your genuine “voice” through too much editing by others. Family members are often too close and know you too well to be objective. College App time can also be pretty stressful for students and their families, so having a neutral third party can be valuable.</p>

<p>The good news is that you sound like an interesting person with much to write about – I like the tinkering stuff! – and that you already do some creative writing. You are correct that creative writing is much more akin to college application essay writing than is SAT essay writing.</p>

<p>Books of college essays can also be helpful, as xrCalico23 suggested. </p>

<p>Feel free to PM me if you have any additional questions!</p>

<p>Whoa, that was extremely insightful and helpful. Thank you so much, christinapreps.</p>

<p>You’re very welcome, smerdy. Good luck with your apps!</p>