Does anybody want to read my essay???

College Essays
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<p>I was wondering if anyone would be willing to read/offer advice on my short answer response and essay. My short answer is written about playing the flute. On the short answer, I would like feedback on the clarity, whether or not my voice comes across and whether the response sounds interesting or just generic.</p>

<p>My essay is about how going to a canoeing camp for 7 years changed me as a person. I would like any editing help plus input on the following things:
1. Do I sound as though I am bragging, or does it come across well
2. Does it sounds unique and interesting or is it stuck in the cliched "summer camp" or "service trip" essay category
3. Does my voice come across
4. Does the essay flow well/anything regarding grammar or editing</p>

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<p>I’d be happy to help. PM and expect a response in 2-3 days. :)</p>

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<p>As a current Dartmouth grad student I would love to assess the quality of your essay. I am always willing to help a future Moose. Send it on over and I would gladly like to help you out.</p>

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<p>I will like to help you . Just PM me .</p>