Edit my essay about a friend's cancer?

<p>So I wrote my common app essay about a person who inspired me, I chose to write about my best friend and her experience with cancer/how she changed me. I would appreciate any feedback! Will anyone read?</p>

<p>I’ll take a read. Keep in mind that you don’t want the essay to be too much about your friend.</p>

<p>Thank you so much! I will keep that in mind :)</p>

<p>focus more on how the friend’s condition changed you. don’t overdramatize it either.</p>

<p>Hi! Would one of you guys be able to read my essay and let me know what you think. I am using it for my: why you’d like to transfer essay for the common application.
I’d appreciated it a lot! Thank you!!</p>