EDll essay "Why Tufts"? Please Critique.

<p>Hi! I am applying to Tufts and I had to write this supplement essay. I haven't run it by <em>anyone</em> yet, please "INDICATE" problems u find with this essay. Also I have been in the U.S. for 2 years, so if there is any grammatical mistakes please let me know. Does it need to be any longer? All kinds of helps are appreciated.................... :)</p>

<p>At the end of my sophomore year, when I started looking at colleges, I considered Tufts as one of my top-priority schools although I knew it would be very competitive to get into that college. That summer I went to visit Tufts with my cousin Uzzal. I was amazed to see the university and its campus. I was surprised to see how a medium size university like Tufts can have its own unique beauty. I talked to couple of my cousin’s friends. Tufts School of Medicine seemed like a perfect fit for someone looking to pursue a carrier in Health care. Tufts’ study abroad program looked very appealing to someone like me who is very eager to explore more of the world. Then he took me to the library, student center and I found those very impressive. On top of that what appealed to me Tufts has an excellent academic record and that it has all of the resources of a major research university, two things that have been toward the very top of my priority list, when searching for schools. When I was leaving the campus; I looked back and thought myself that it would be the greatest gift ever to get into a school like Tufts University.</p>

<p>sounds good, but doesnt it have to be 50 words?</p>

<p>500 characters actually, so that's way too long. Also I'd advise you not to just post up your essay like this - PMing it to interested readers might be more wise, you wouldn't want any thieves taking advantage of you!!</p>

<p>As for edits (I'm going to chop it down for you so that you can fit the limit), I'll PM it to you.</p>

<p>Yes I agree with ^, you should not post this -- but you should private message it to anyone interested. </p>

<p>You should definitely condense it - and take away the details of what you did that day and leave it at just what Tufts means to you.</p>

<p>Tufts like short "why tufts" that are to the point and about a few specific things you like most about the school. You want to convey why Tufts is right for you. Choose two or even one thing that draws you to Tufts and develop that. And it really should be around 50 words</p>