Essay about menstruation- ok?

<p>Okay, as I had to read it for the editing task above, I can tell you I don't think the adcom is likely to be positively swayed by the essay. It's a bit too "in your face", as if to say "I'm so mature I can discuss the most personal details of my cycle". Sometimes (most of the time?) that sort of frankness is just inappropriate you know, not mature.
It's also, and this is more important, rather demeaning (not to mention just physiologically baseless) to women, who have every bit the math prowess of men. Actually, more: unlike men, they can multiply.</p>

<p>no, definitely not. also, assuming you were to use this, you need to make your first paragraph clearer. punctuation in some parts can be changed, "When I step outside, the first feet and heart and eyes that I see ask me two small questions through their pitter patter of difference."</p>

<p>sestina...you know what i say...send the damn thing. I like it. Sure, its weird, but it is original. I guarantee that no adcom has ever read THAT before. If you get someone who appreciates individuality...who has been bored out of his or her mind by the same exact essays, this could be something that he would appreciate....and, in the worst case scenario...if you get an adcom that thinks your essay is weird, theyll just put it aside and move on...BUT they will remember it. There is no way they wont remember it. Theyll remember u as that "menstruation girl." You might be the joke of the adcom...but youll get in. Thats how i see it.</p>

<p>quick point: in my calculus class there are about 5 guys and about 15 girls. oh, and our math teacher is female too.</p>

<p>Has she been responding, or are you guys commenting for the heck of it? Because I think the consensus was established a while ago, which is: EWW.</p>

<p>no more responses necessary; i already submitted all applications and this essay isn't on any of them.</p>

<p>You are a very ungracious child.</p>

<p>that was an uncalled for remark. she wants this thread to be closed so just do as she pleases lol</p>

<p>my eyes burn!!!...need..salvent... im not sure how a male admissions person would think.</p>

<p>shrek: Sestina makes me tired; she asks for help and then does not respond to anyone's comments other than saying, "please, close my thread; I vant to be alone."</p>

<p>well it's not the most disgusting thing i've heard. seems like people are overreacting...jesus...can't you people handle a little detail? anyway, I still wouldn't use it, it serves no purpose.</p>

<p>ah aite aite haha sry patty :-D i agree</p>

<p>Although this is a very interesting essay, I think that it is just a bit too risky. "rotting mandarin oranges"--come on now.</p>

<p>well um i am speachless.</p>

<p>Out of curiosity what did you get on the exam?</p>

<p>It's the equivalent of describing a nosebleed in detail. "The blood oozed and gushed, threatening to enter my dry, sealed lips. The soft tissue spouted dust as I lifted it from the box. It approached the every ensuing rampage of blood with hesitation, clining to its brethren for the added help of a double layer. But I hadn't the time."</p>