<p>Hey guys,
So, I'm in dilemma for grading this essay. I personally gave it 4/6, but at least when I was studying for SAT (this is not my essay... It's the student I'm tutoring), I used to introduce my examples right away. Can you guys give feedbacks on what you believe is the score of this essay (out of 6)? Thanks! :-)</p>
<p>Prompt: Do we benefit from learning about the flaws of people we admire and respect?</p>
<p>Essay
In cartoons, super heroes never make any mistakes. Superman and Batman always find a way to get out from a perplexing situations. However, they are not real. Our real idols are people just like us. They make mistakes because they're human. I think we do benefit from learning about the flaws of people we admire and respect.
Role models for people are different to each person. Even if they admire the same person, they're most likely to admire different aspects of that person. This means that some flaws of the role model is not going to have same effect on everybody. If they truly admire that person, they may even admire his or her mistakes. People learn from their mistakes, but they also learn from other people's mistakes. It could be beneficial to people if they observe those mistakes prudently. For instance, John F. Kennedy made a mistake during Vietnam War and announced publicly that it was his mistake, and he's the blame for it. Although he made a mistake, that was very courageous and honorable thing to do. It's extremely difficult to accept one's mistake, especially publicly.
Another beneficial thing is that we could get courage and hopes from other's mistakes. Sometimes, role models seem too formidable and inhumane because they accomplished great things. One example would be Mozart. He was a child prodigy and an amazing composer. His music is art. To normal people, it may be daunting to just trying to be anything close to him. However, he was a person and made unwise choices by drinking and wasting his life. He died early in his age when he could have accomplished so much more. People could learn that if they try hard enough and lead a healthy and happy life, they could perhaps compose even better songs than Mozart did. People get hopes from their idol's flaws. They realize that those famous people made mistakes, but they still succeeded.
If we truly admire someone, even certain mistakes are beneficial. They could be valuable life lessons that they could learn from. It's only beneficial if we choose to observe it carefully and learn something from it so we don't make the same mistake they made in the future. That could make us more successful than our idols, and we could perhaps be the role models of the future generations.</p>