Essay risking cliche/risky (I think this is my THIRD topic? Sorry..it's worth it!)

College Essays
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<p>Hi there,</p>

<p>I think this is my third topic... for which I apologize. However, I have come up with a very very close to final draft of my college application essay and I think it is actually very good!</p>

<p>It may be classified as a "risky" illness as it discusses a childhood disease I went through, a very difficult decision I had to make, and how I came out of it a stronger person than before.</p>

<p>There are some aspects that may sound cliche, but I believe in the different ways I have approached them they are appropriate.</p>

<p>Please leave a post here if you are willing to read it and provide C&C. I'm looking for suggestions and feedback, not sympathy (although I thank you for your potential thoughts)</p>

<p>to moderators: I promise this will be my last topic... I apologize if you consider this spamming your forums, I just think that this draft is so different from my previous that it needs an entirely new thread to be created. My other threads are on later pages in this sub forum</p>

<p>Thank you all for any help you may provide,</p>

<p>Joshua</p>

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<p>bring up my post</p>

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<p>PM me... Beware though, I hate verbosity.</p>

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<p>I'd love to read it.
PM me.</p>

<p>Don't worry - I graduated last year</p>

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<p>bring up my post</p>

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<p>PM it to me--I am very hyperaware of cliches so I'd be glad to help and edit.</p>

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<p>sent</p>

<p>fiona, thank you for your suggestions, I am revising it as I type</p>

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<p>Esgee, I very much appreciate your response. I definitely agree with you on all of your points and am working on incorporating them into my next draft. That last mistake was really a careless one, I feel really stupid lol "I cannot wait for wait for September, 2009"</p>

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<p>bring up my post</p>

<p>new draft</p>