<p>idcubed- yes, I wish I had come here before I wrote my essays,too...anyone who actually KNOWS me sees ME in my essay, but if you don't then I guess it's a bit...not good enough to persuade someone to let me in.</p>
<p>Idcubed...i think your essay did show more about your personality..don't sweat it</p>
<p>idcubed-- check your pm. i sent the essay</p>
<p>ah what the heck. i am putting it here. i am sorry, i am just very very nervous. heres my essay. </p>
<p>I was coming out of Beth Sholom, an elderly resident home, after I finished helping with Bingo. My dad was outside in the parking lot waiting to pick me up. Just then, one of the bingo sponsors, pointing towards me, asked my dad," Is that your son right there?" My dad replied yes and then the sponsor answered, "He is really mature for his age. He makes me seem unnecessary." My dad scoffed at that remark.</p>
<p>Since the age of fourteen, my dad has repeatedly stressed me that I need to be more mature because it is an important virtue. My dad incorporated every bad trait of mine into the term "immaturity". In response, I often inquired him about his definition of "maturity." He used to include irrelevant and sometimes even contradictory terms in the definition. These experiences have made the word seem very humorous to me. </p>
<p>So, its really not surprising that "maturity " is my favorite word. I hear it almost everyday of my life. Maybe, getting into UVA will seem to be a sign of my maturity to my father . I don't know when my dad will acknowledge my maturity, but I can hardly wait for that day.</p>
<p>Logitech, I thought your essay was okay, though not the most spectacular I've heard. I do like the way you ended your essay. That was good. Take everyone's criticism on your essay with a grain of salt. The thing about essays is that they are subjective. Everyone is not going to like your essay, and everyone is not going to hate it either. Because essays are subjective, I can't really say what the admissions officers would think of it because they have different thoughts and opinions from mine and others. You never know. They may love your essay.</p>
<p>Crichesill, I thought your essay was good. I liked the way that you started it out. You took a different approach to the introduction, and did not say the traditional "my favorite word is...."</p>
<p>hmm all essays were good
but i feel odd that i didnt write about my favorite word (milk jajaj)
i actually wrote about looking out the window in my home....</p>
<p>i got in echols</p>
<p>good luck everyone~~!</p>
<p>I thought all the essays were ok, but felt they need more of kick to seperate them from the thousands of students.</p>
<p>Majadito - wow your from bolivia? My parents are from Bolivia and I got into UVA ED. Are you going to UVA?</p>
<p>Majadito, I didn't write about my favorite word either. I also chose to write about looking out my window. Haha, maybe that will be a good thing so to add a bit of variety to the thousands of application essays! I'll find out April 1, I suppose. Congrats on Echols (and that goes for everyone else who is already in!)</p>
<p>Elizabeth</p>
<p>i did the trading bodies essay
anyway, there are many ways to stand out and the short essay is only one of them....good luck eveyone on getting in!!</p>
<p>from what i gather, uva does regard the essays heavily: i just got a personalized response to mine in the mail along with my echol's letter. </p>
<p>your personality will come across in your writing, believe it or not.
and i don't think there's really a need to suck up to them, just write an impressive essay. be clever, and sound interested in learning or other intelligent things.</p>
<p>and wow, you are so ahead of the game with essay writing and all, i'm impressed! best of luck!</p>
<p>I did the trading bodies essay and wrote about my thumbs. </p>
<p>And I got in! So it couldn't have reeked. :D</p>
<p>My essay... this was my least favorite of the three but regardless what do we think.. I still haven't heard and am scared to death.</p>
<pre><code>Whats in a word? Beyond formal definitions or underlying connotations lies potential. A word can convey a multitude of things: feelings, actions, objects. Over time, words have given meaning to thoughts beyond the material: what else can convey that which is neither seen nor experienced? This is the great possibility words have allowed: the flight of the human mind.
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<p>Anything is possible. It is not easy to accredit a quote that has for so long been a part of social conversation. This is the glory of the human language, how as a word, my favorite word, possibility can suggest anything. It is everything once thought impossible, everything today that is, and everything that someday will be. The limitations of possibility are only bounded by the human mind; imagination is its cradle.</p>
<pre><code> The strength of the word is individualized. Possibility is all in the realm of the mind: what appears possible to one can completely contradict another; this is the great diversity of the word. Fifty years ago, John F. Kennedy made the idea of a man on the moon a possible concept. Two hundred years before that, the idea of the United States as a new nation too became a possibility. Neither development was automatic; each seemed unfeasible to a vast majority upon initiation, but through thought, effort, and imagination they became reality.
Possibilities are never automatic. This is the words truest sentiment: it is chance. Life is full of these chances, possibilities, and options. It is expanding beyond others expectations of chance that allows us to grow as a society, and embrace boundless possibilities. With this attitude, anything is possible.
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<p>kellyelly- Please check your PMs...</p>
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<p>I chose the same subject. I described the view as I saw it with a little embellishment - but not much. When it came to what I'd want to change, I said that I did not want to change a thing!</p>
<p>I wondered if not wanting to change anything would go down well but that is how I felt. Anyway, I got in as an Echols Program Scholar so it could not have hurt me! Maybe it came across that I was a pretty contented person - which I am!!</p>
<p>brinnaballerina, that's good except I would've added a little more directly pertaining to you personally. Interestingly, your essay has a similar style to mine (although I wrote about that Quote). Did anyone else write about the quote?</p>
<p>...I don't even remember the quote....</p>
<p>it was kinda long and from some nobel prize winner dude. i think..</p>
<p>you mean the "while looking for order I have found mystery" quote? I wrote that essay.</p>
<p>Maybe I just didn't read it? But I'm not sure how I could have missed it...I had the hard copy as well as the internet.</p>