<p>i have had my teacher profread my essay and the essay seems to not focus on me</p>
<p>and i kinda also feel like that too..</p>
<p>what are the best ways to approach the most influential person essay?</p>
<p>Thanks.</p>
<p>This essay should be about how this person has impacted or influenced you and/or your reflections about this person. Even though the essay’s about another person, it needs to tell the college a lot about you.</p>
<p>Do you feel like you’ve changed (maybe it was subconscious) because of this person’s relationship to you? Maybe some things you think about were put into a completely new perspective because of this person. </p>
<p>Or better yet, does this person highlight or bring out personality traits in yourself that you never knew?</p>
<p>Ok thanks to everyone!</p>
<p>I have some more questions if you do not mind:</p>
<p>1) Should I put in some personal examples of my traits?
–if i do, then wouldn’t this be telling a completely different aspect of essay that can be used in an essay itself?</p>
<p>2) Do i directly talk about how this INFLUENCe will help me in college and careers??
—or dont talk about it at all since i have mentioned my college, majors, careers in a supplement essay.</p>
<p>3) Just curious, how do colleges really use the essay? a breaking point??
—i will do my best</p>
<p>Thanks!</p>
<p>Answers to your questions
- I don’t think you talk about your traits. You show your traits by your response/reflections about this person, how s/he impacted you, what you did in response, how you changed…
It should be primarily about you. SHOW - don’t Tell is the rule.<br> - In your reflection, you can say how “this INFLUENCe will help me in college and careers” but try not to overreach or it sounds cliche.
- This is what I think. If it’s very good, it can help. If it’s below average, it can hurt. If it’s good, it’s a wash.</p>