Evaluate my essay please

Well I sent my applications already so I guess there’s no point. I think this is my best essay but my mom hates it so much.

I have to admit that I was a typical young girl who admired princesses from fairy tales. I especially adored the heroines in Disney movies. Among all the beautiful princesses, Ariel – the Little Mermaid – was my favorite. Besides her beauty, I loved her voice, which I believed was the most angelic voice in the world. On the other hand, I despised the Sea Witch, Ursula. Unlike Ariel, she was old, fat, and ugly. My young mind filled with anger when Ursula turned into a beautiful girl with Ariel’s voice to cheat her way into gaining the throne of the Sea Kingdom. I’m sure everyone felt the same way I did: in toy stores, there were numerous Ariel, Eric, Flounder, and Sebastian-related products. Meanwhile, there was no product that was related to the dreadful Sea Witch. However, now I believe that Sea Witch is a character who has the significant influence on me.<br>
Years later when I was no longer a young child, I suddenly wanted to watch the movie again to recapture the sensations that fascinated and thrilled me when I was a child. However, the movie impressed me in a different way from what I expected. The Little Mermaid was no longer the beautiful and ideal princess I used to know. She was an overly carefree, audacious, and immature child with an unrealistic dream. Ariel first shows her lack of responsibility by not appearing in the show that is a major event in the kingdom. Later, simply attracted by Prince Eric’s handsome appearance, despite the fact that she doesn’t know him as a person, she decides to risk her life and trade away her voice to woo him. Her voice is not used only for singing: without her voice, Ariel can’t express her opinions and must simply obey the will of other people. The fact that Ariel is willing to gamble her life and the entire mermaid kingdom on a guy whom she doesn’t know very well disappointed me.
On the other hand, despite the fact that Ursula is evil, she is a woman with great abilities who knows how to perform incredible magic. While Ariel is a talented singer who enjoys singing, she never tries to polish her talent. Meanwhile, Ursula tries to maximize her talent to accomplish her ambition. Ursula’s fatal defects are her non-royal origin and her ugliness. Because Ursula happens to be not a princess, she cannot rule the kingdom. I’m sure today no one believes in the divine right of monarchy as Louis XIV did. But her unappealing appearance also repels potential success. Unfortunately, ugliness is still a disadvantage. In the time the movie takes place, it was one of the deadly sins of woman. Therefore, I believe Ursula is a very brave character because she is not ashamed of her appearance. Although Ursula sometimes transforms into a beautiful woman to manipulate people, she usually does not disguise herself to hide her natural form.
Everyone adores the cute and beautiful Little Mermaid while despising the evil and ugly Ursula. But in fact we should admire Ursula’s ability and initiative. She is a poor soul with too much talent and ambition for a wrong era. While Ariel takes her high social status, musical talent, and beauty for granted, Ursula maximizes her talent despite her unprivileged status and appearance. Rather than taking what I have for granted, I want to maximize my talent as Ursula does even though I refuse to use dirty tactics that Ursula uses.

<p>it's great. i like your unique eyes! i wish i could have written a witty, yet meaningful essay like yours.. (mine was, i think, a way too heavy T_T)</p>

<p>in my non-professional opinion, i think it reads too much as a Little Mermaid analysis paper right now, with not enough connection to how it applies to you.</p>

<p>i think you need to expound on the subject of accomplishing things in the best way you can a bit more.</p>

<p>the idea is great, its really unique, but i have to agree with submerged and say that it sounds a bit too much like a summary on the little mermaid
you should have taken a few of the concrete details out and put in a few anecdotes about yourself
other than that, im sure this version will still be great</p>

<p>lol, you won't believe this, but I wrote my essay on Ariel too!!!! except i didn't talk about the plot, i just compared myself to her. yeah, i didn't want to show it to my parents cuz i knew they'd just think it was stupid...but i sent it off to my colleges anyway.</p>

<p>Wow, I'm a guy and I also wrote about Ariel!</p>

<p>jk of course. Anyways, that's a very unique essay that caught my attention. You don't really put yourself in the essay until the very end, but I think that's ok, because your thought process comes through well. If your goal is to show your thought process, then I'd say this is good.</p>

<p>I like it, its really neat lol. I would have never thought of that. And yeah, I find myself thinking similarly to how you think...but Ariel was really good looking.</p>

<p>ahem.</p>