<p>SHOULD WE CARE JUST AS MUCH ABOUT PEOPLE IN OTHER COUNTRIES AS WE DO ABOUT PEOPLE IN OUR OWN COUNTRY?</p>
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<p>GRADE IT!! PLEASE!</p>
<p>Can someone grade my essay and my handwriting</p>
<p>Kimmy Louie, your essay is great. It demonstrates what the questions or prompt wanted; however, you wrote all examples on America and the way it took care about other countries. This is wrong as u should diversify ur examples. One from history, one literature, and one personal. I’d give u a 8 for the essay. The one u wrote that had 4 examples was better and I gave it a 11. So if u change the examples, you can take a 10. </p>
<p>Where are u from. Are u international.</p>
<p>No, not necessarily form Lit, Hist, and personal… If it’s good, It’s good</p>
<p>2200andbeyond, what score do u give this essay. It’s a good thing, but the reader will get bored from the same topic in the three examples. Do u understand my perspective.</p>
<p>Well, I’m emphasizing the ‘American’ standpoint.</p>
<p>Also, handwriting a-okay?</p>
<p>@Mitcho,
I do understand your perspective, but graders won’t bother if they are well written because they are aware that the student only had 25 minutes srsly… All what they are hoping for is a well-written essay where the point is conveyed clearly and structure is good… Diversity in examples does give a plus point, but it is not absolutely necessary. Now, hadn’t read the essay actually. I was just stating a fact in the former post XD
Now, skimmed it in 2-3 minutes like an SAT reader would, and I give it an 8-9.
and your handwriting is more than fine @kimmy… You should srsly see mine… lol :D</p>
<p>I’m not debating your answer. But how can I make it a 10-11-12 essay.</p>
<p>I am not trying to put your morale down, kimmy… That’s what I thought it took over in all… Maybe a better Introduction. That’s what maybe put me off a lil… I don’t know though… Just that I wrote a similar essay and got a 9… with 3 examples an all :/</p>
<p>Btw, every essay I read for you s better than the one before… Keep it up… I am srsly not the best at this essay grading thing, as you might have noticed XD…</p>
<p>I’m not mad or anything! Really, it’s just that I really want to know what makes a 10-12 essay.</p>
<p>I think you need to work on your warrants, connecting your examples to your main points. It’s not enough just to have evidence, you need to logically connect them to your thesis as best you can in 25 minutes. The last sentences of your example paragraphs are a start. :)</p>
<p>So if I use half of paragraph on connecting, would that be a 10-12 essay?</p>
<p>I don’t think there’s a specific formula for high scoring essays. However, having a stronger relationship between your evidence/data and your overall claim would help your argument. After all, SAT Essays are graded on both the way you use conventions of standard English and the effectiveness of your argument.</p>
<p>You only have 25 minutes, so maybe half a paragraph is too much. I’ll give you an example of what I’m talking about. In one of your previous essays, your claim was, “Small decisions can lead to huge consequences.” This is found in the last paragraph of the essay.</p>
<p>This is one of your body paragraphs: “Another example can be found in the George Orwell’s book, 1984. Main character, Winston Smith, is oppressed by the despotic government and wants to break free from its limited actions. So he did something extremely illegal and unheard of: he had intercourse with a lady he loved. In this one seemingly innocuous action, Smith is actually breaking multiple laws set by the AirStrip One government. Although he and Julia continued their secret romance for a very long time, they soon got caught. This one simple love affair turned into a life-changing (literally and figuratively) for both Winston Smith and his lover, Julia.”</p>
<p>This paragraph solely shows the example you use. At a basic level, all you would need to do to strengthen this paragraph is to replace the last sentence with, “Winston and Julia’s small decision lead to a major consequence since they inevitably were caught. Their simple love affair demonstrates the potentially destructive power of a simple decision.”</p>
<p>First, I would like to state handwriting does not affect your overall score. Therefore, you should not waste time practicing your handwriting if you could spend that much valued time practicing for the SAT.</p>
<p>Secondly, though your essay obviously follows the proper guideline to writing an academic essay AND stays focused, your essay conveys a monotonous tone (in my opinion) with your limited sentence structure. You will realize soon that essays earning high marks effectively defend their position and contain a unique writing style.</p>
<p>Keep practicing though, you will only get better the more essays you write.</p>
<p>Score: 8</p>
<p>handwriting does matter^ not legible=lower score.</p>
<p>But thanks for all the tips. Rereading all of them makes me ask how many people actually do get a 12 on their essay? They have to achieve perfect grammar, interesting tone, cool syntax, etc in 25 minutes.</p>
<p>They must be amazing writers. lol ;p</p>
<p>Ummm…trust me legibility does not affect your essay score. Like the College Board designed AP Lang and Lit test, legibility should be the last of your worries. College Board makes sure to hire numerous employees to grade essays to satisfy those in dire need of their SAT score the next day. I am fairly certain that if the two graders at the table are incapable of reading your essay, the essay is passed on to countless employees to translate and give an unbiased score. By the looks of your essay, legibility should be the least of your worries.</p>
<p>But hey, it’s just advice. Spend YOUR time however YOU want to.</p>
<p>No need to get feisty! lol. I really am not saying your wrong. But I constantly hear it through college confidential.</p>
<p>But thank you for the tips!</p>
<p>Sorry about that I’m extremely tired and grouchy right now. 
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