<p>I've finished one of the two required UC essays and was wondering if someone would be so kind as to look over it since it's nowhere near perfect. I'm gearing this one especially to my first choice college, UCLA, as I would absolutely love to get into their design program.</p>
<p>Prompt: Describe the world you come from for example, your family, community or school and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.</p>
<p>All tips and constructive criticism appreciated! I'll PM the essay to those who are interested. Thanks for your time. :)</p>