Feedback on Academic Dismissal Letter?!

Dear Academic Review Board,

I’m writing this letter to appeal the decision to dismiss me from this institution. It has come to this solely because of my decisions and lack of in the face of problems that emerged this past year. Over these two semesters, I have been overwhelmed with issues within my control that I have inadequately handled and issues outside of it that I have failed to address.

Both my semesters have been characterized by not taking my classes seriously. I simply avoided addressing any difficulties I had. I did not ask the teacher for help nor did I attend the guided study sessions and so my grade suffered. It was only made worse by the fact that I refused to acknowledge there was a problem, I was so sure of myself because I did not want to admit I had a problem and pushed back studying for my classes until the last moment. When my grades finally began to drop, I did not take responsibility for the role my reluctance to seek help played. I refused to recognize what went wrong and by simply said that I could not handle the class. I lost confidence in my ability and I lost my motivation. I began to attend class less and less, losing more and more credit for failing to show up or exceeding the allowed number of absences. This cost me letter grades in each class. When I still could have turned things around and salvaged these grades by simply meeting with the professors, I gave up, finishing the semester with a 1.480.

In addition, two issues arose. Financial issues arose because I had not turned in my FASFA on time and so my father had to strain himself further in order to get money to supplement the gap in coverage. For the entire semester, I watched as the stress from this began to affect his health and I blamed myself. Instead of saying that I made a mistake and resolving to work harder that semester to be awarded further aid, I once again saw it as confirmation that I was a failure and couldn’t be helped. To make matters worse, one of my closest friends had been fighting an aggressive and terminal form of brain cancer and committed suicide before it could run its course. I blamed myself because as she began to reach the end, I found it harder and harder to be there as she deteriorated mentally and physically. It ate at me when I found out and I let it overcome me. I took this as another sign that I was once again a failure–I told myself that I failed everyone and that was it.

I stopped attending classes, spending most of my days doing nothing more than wasting time to escape the reality before me. When I did attend class, I was hardly ever engaged. I neglected my assignments and on some level believed if I ignored them, that was it. I was eventually jolted back by my sister who noticed the change. She helped me deal with the suicide of my friend, the financial issues, and helped me realize that I could only become a failure if I let my failure define me instead of teach me how to succeed.

While it was too late to seriously turn around my grades due to the absences that had piled up, I could still work with my professors on the assignments I had not turned in or were not yet due to ensure I had the best possible grade. I took advantages of resources I should have been using all semester: the library, my professors during office hours and e-mail, and other students for study groups or peer edits for major papers. While I ended the semester with a 1.943, the A- I received in my History course due to my late-semester effort showed me I could succeed with hard work on my part. I finally understood what I have been doing consistently wrong these past few semesters.

Looking back, I realize my main issue is that I have not wanted to put in the effort needed to succeed because I was not aiming to succeed in what I was passionate about. My planned major had initially been Engineering but after working with my professor for History on my papers and eventually coming in to just talk about the readings, I realized my real interest was the economics of history. Learning what path I am truly interested in I think will be as important as any techniques I adopt to keep myself successful.

Simply knowing where I want to focus my attention is not enough, I need to structure my day and time towards realizing all my goals. This means not only cutting out possible distractions but effectively using time that I deem productive. I plan on using a schedule planning method I picked up from a seminar on practicing success where I map out my goals, then map out everything I do during the day, everyday, for a week, then marking each activity or moment with a number corresponding to which goal of mine it furthers. If it doesn’t contribute to anything, I am entertaining wasteful time that could grow to undermine my productivity. If my schedule is dominated by tasks which further low-priority goals, I need to figure out if my high-priority goals are too high. If I my schedule is dominated by higher numbered goals, I have to ask myself if these goals are too low, if I am not being honest with myself, or if everything’s alright.

Already I have tried this time management process over break and it’s allowed me to focus on reviewing what I learned this semester in my ECON200, to better schedule my days around my job, and to reduce the time I waste procrastinating or simply doing nothing productive. I know that I can seriously follow through with this time management strategy and have gotten another friend to even join me. We both exchange schedules to make sure that we are not fooling ourselves about whether or not we are being productive and whether or not our goals are serious. This has also made me realize that I should not be fearful as I once was of embarrassment from reaching out for help. Before, I acted as if admitting a failure was the same as deciding I was a failure. By avoiding this, it allowed me to avoid responsibility for my failings but also for correcting them. I now see that if I wish to succeed, I must realize that by understanding my limits and getting support in managing them, I can turn this into a strength and organize my habits and behavior with my weaknesses in mind so as to not fall for the same trap again.

For this semester, I would have three primary goals: attend every class (unless sick), meet or contact each professor once a week, and maintain no lower than a B average (3.1). Achieving at least 3.1 GPA this semester would push me to up to a 2.4 GPA, leaving academic probation. My secondary goals will change each week depending on my assignments but will reflect working towards achieving my primaries…I plan to take advantage of guided study sessions and tutors along with working with other students in my class, together, to prepare for exams or go over lectures and information in the book. With my time management techniques, I will be able to efficiently maximize the amount of time I spend on each subject so that I can focus on my weaknesses, test my strengths, and keep up with the work. I have also gone ahead to examine the syllabi of the professors with open sections at this point, making sure to understand how to reach them, their TAs, and the resources they offer and the department offers to do well in the course.

If I am allowed to stay at (college) this semester on academic probation I will be equipped with actual strategies and plans to take advantage of resources and actively manage my own studies and time. With constant communication between my teachers and myself, along with between my advisor and I, I will be able to stay on top of any developing issues while getting help understanding any mistakes or flaws in my work that may impede my success.

Thank you for giving me the chance to explain this past year and hopefully another opportunity to prove that I am able to succeed at (college).

I like that you take responsibility for your poor grades, and that you have a course of action for the future. But do yourself and the review board a favor: make this CONSIDERABLY shorter. I’d say cut this down at least by half. A much shorter letter will pack a greater punch. Good luck!

:frowning: how do I cut it down

This is my second draft (not a good sign for length, I know) and I keep hitting a wall with regards to how I can fully explain the issue and my plan to move forward

Here’s an example – it’s your 2nd paragraph, cut down:

Both my semesters have been characterized by not taking my classes seriously. I simply avoided addressing any difficulties I had and refused to acknowledge there was a problem. I did not take responsibility for my dropping grades, refused to recognize what went wrong and simply told myself that I could not handle the class. I lost confidence and motivation, began missing classes and exceeded the allowed number of allowed absences. This cost me letter grades in each class. I finished the semester with a 1.480.

– 86 words, compared to your 197. Do the same for every paragraph. Be ruthless: remember, the committee has to read many such letters.

This letter is way too long…WAY too long. You need to cut to the facts and not put all the other extraneous info in the letter.

The key elements are what you plan to do that is different for the upcoming term. They already KNOW why you were dismissed. Don’t give excuses…give reasons if they are pertinent and are no longer going to be an issue.

I cut 100 words out of paragraph 3. You have had a tough time but there was way too much going on in that paragraph about how you blamed yourself.

Shorter version:

In addition, two issues arose. Because I did not turn in my FASFA on time, my father had to strain himself to get money to pay for the extra college costs. For the entire semester, I watched as the stress from this began to affect his health. To make matters worse, one of my closest friends had been fighting an aggressive and terminal form of brain cancer and committed suicide before it could run its course. I found it harder and harder to be there as she deteriorated mentally and physically. I have been overcome by sorrow.

As everyone has said, this is far too long. Additionally, assuming you are an authentic student with a true impending dismissal – what are the school policies about this letter? Who does it go to, and what will they do with it?

It might be more effective to write a cover letter that is 60% specific and measurable plans and future strategies, 20% self-blame analytics, and 20% asking for a face-to-face meeting with decision makers to plead your case in person. Anyone can wallow in misery and promise to be good. Admins are numb to that; ask to see a person and perhaps your epiphany will seem genuine.

Run on sentences much?

This letter reads like a 14 year old trying to sound smart. Contorted sentence structures. Big words.

Write like a college student: Short, punchy sentences, three paragraphs maximum (nobody likes to wade through blocks of text) and NO PASSIVE VOICE. Sorry to shout. Stuff like “Impede my success”? Sounds like an excuse.

Paragraph One- I didn’t take my academics seriously enough and now I face dismissal. I accept responsibility for having messed up. College is a lot of work and I know realize what it will take to be successful here.

Paragraph Two- this is my action plan to get back on track- time management, focusing on academics and keeping myself to short lead times, more engagement with my professors and TA’s, etc.

Paragraph Three- Thank you for considering my appeal.

Three paragraphs. Cut out the verbiage and the run on sentences and you have a shot.

You will want to trim that down to a single page. That should be enough to get a conference if they are willing and explain the issues fully in person.

I know you have only asked for feedback on your letter, and you have received good suggestions here. I would suggest that you might want to examine your motivation for wanting to stay at this school. In all honesty, you don’t sound like you were ready for college yet, or at least for the program you chose. You had a difficult time adjusting and pretty much just shut down on all counts, not just academically but on the financial end also. It seems unlikely that you are going to make a drastic turn around at this point and start handling everything as you should. It sounds as if there might be some depression also, and if so you need to address that. Have you thought about either taking a break from school to figure out your priorities, or maybe transferring to a cc to figure out what you want to do? There is no shame in admitting that maybe you weren’t quite ready and reexamining your decisions. Best of luck with whatever happens!

Great advice here on the length of the letter. I sometimes help my students with letters like this - so please follow everyone’s advice, and shorten the letter, and rewrite in an active voice without all the wordy sentences. I do second @takeitallin’s post about your motivation for staying in school. If you have not done so already, you should get advice from some of your professors (perhaps the one that gave you an A-, and also from some of the more sympathetic ones who had no choice but to give you a failing grade) and see what is a realistic approach. Maybe some time off would be a good thing. Explore all these options with people who are familiar with your academic background.

I would also be looking into your local community college so you can take classes and SHOW that you have learned your lesson.

Thanks for all the advice guys, I’ll be revising my letter tonight with all your suggestions and try to be as brutal with the legnth

Yes, please be brutal. I couldn’t even finish it.

^^^^ditto