Finished editing, can someone please check it over?

<p>Hi everyone! So today I finished editing my college essay for commonapp, I had it reviewed by an english teacher a week ago, but I'd like to send it tonight, so I was hoping I could get some feedback. I am open to all suggestions, no matter how harsh :)</p>

<p>If anyone is willing to give me maybe 5 minutes tops, I would really appreciate it!</p>