first draft of life story, any feedback?

<p>I have just finished the first draft of my common app essay discussing my "life story". Would anyone be willing to read through and give any suggestions? I would be happy to help back!</p>

<p>Sure. I’d be happy to take a look. </p>

<p>I’ll give it a shot.</p>

<p>thank you guys so much!</p>

<p>Sure. I can take a look at it.</p>