First ever scholarship essays... would someone read em?

<p>Hi everyone</p>

<p>I'm applying for a scholarship (postmarked by Thursday) and would love some feedback on my essays - they're the first I've ever written for college or scholarships (I'm in the class of 2008) and so I'm not 100% sure of what I'm doing. If anyone has a few minutes to spare, I'd love some feedback. PM me with your e-mail if you're interested.</p>

<p>Thanks very much!
Colin</p>