Good supplement?

<p>For the first supplement question, is this alright?</p>

<p>American University is constantly ranked among the best when it comes to Social Sciences. Being that I plan on majoring in History and ultimately becoming some sort of History teacher, American is my number one choice. My interests in politics also back up my resolve, and these are just two of many reasons why American would help me achieve my academic goals. Being located in the political hub of the nation would allow me to further explore my political interests while simultaneously expanding my knowledge of history. I’ve had my heart set on American every since my visit last year, and I would be applying ED if my financial situation wasn’t such an issue. To me, American University is the perfect fit.</p>

<p>Good content but better word choice and more eloquent phrasing would make it stand out more. </p>

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<p>Here’s the thing - how many people applying to AU write basically the same thing? More people apply for SPA, SIS and Kogod than anything else, and most essays probably sound alike. How can you make your answer stand out more?</p>

<p>Don’t ever start a sentence with “being that”. It’s not proper English. Use “since”. Also, don’t post essays online unless you’re offering them up for anyone to copy.</p>

<p>I think eldeekay9 hit the nail on the head.</p>

<p>In addition to that, you could replace “American” with “GW” or “Georgetown” and write more or less the same essay. You’ve answered “Why Washington, DC?” as much as “Why American?” I think.</p>

<p>Also, what MommaJ said: both the “being that” part and the “don’t post your essays online” part.</p>

<p>If we really want to be picky about “proper English,” don’t use “since” to start a dependent clause unless you are referring to a time-related event. Use “because” instead. But yes, “being that” is unconditionally and always wrong except in casual speech among the closest of friends.</p>