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<p>Is it necessary to make mistakes, even when doing so has negative consequences for other people?</p>

<p>Making mistakes in necessary, even if doing so have negative consequences for other people or yourself. Mishaps teachers people new ideas, morals, lessons and these newfound facts help people live a better life whether it's your, your country, or your fictional counterpart. Several examples that demonstrate this can be found in history, literature, and experience.</p>

<p>To start off, throughout most of America's history, there had been always a racism problem. Most notably and revolutionary was during the Civil Rights Movement during the 1960s, when African Americans, whites, and all nationalities joined together to fight for equal rights for all people regardless of race, skin color, religion, etc. For more than 200 years, our constitution would segregate between white and colored. Currently, this action is viewed as a mistake because we now believe that everyone is able to have equal rights. But because of this mistake, it allowed us, presently, to learn about and never to redo it. Thus our country's mistakes taught us to treat everyone equally regardless of any factors. </p>

<p>Another example can be found in muckraker Upton Sinclair's book, The Jungle, which depicted the livelihood in immigrants during the Progressive Era. In the book, readers follow the story of the Jurgis's family who came here from Lithuania in search for a better life. Their mistakes along the way from New York City to Chicago to Packington all taught them how to live in a salvage city. Their first mistake was believing the agency in New York City, which taught them to never blatantly hand their money to anybody who offers to complete a good deed for them. The next mistake was buying a house without reading a contract, which taught them to read every document carefully and meticulously. Another mistake was arguing with the manager, which taught them to never argue with a boss unless one wants to lose his or her job instantly. Although these mistakes resulted in oppressive lessons, it did teach immigrants key value to live in a wild, disgusting world during the late 1900s.</p>

<p>Mistakes in school, life, work have taught everyone essential lessons, morals, and traits needed for anyone who is planning to live on earth. They are also extremely common and happen almost daily. For example, I made a mistake yesterday when I was baking chocolate chip cookies. So while I was making the dough, I forgot a very essential ingredient known as the flour. But at that time, I didn't realize at all and I continued my way of making the spherical balls to place on the cookie tray. At first I thought it was a bit odd to have such a liquid-y consistency, but because I was using a new recipe, I thought that maybe that was how it was suppose to be. Only after I baked it for 2 minutes, I realized I forgot the flour. This mistake taught me that no matter how new of a recipe may be, always double check the procedures. I don't think I will ever make that mistake ever agin. </p>

<p>After a close analysis of Civil Rights Movement, the Jungle, and my disgusting cookies, it is necessary to make mistakes in life. "Our lives are 'experiments with truth'", writes Parker Palmer in her writing, Let Your Life Speak. Mistakes teaches you morals, lessons, and truths and it is essential to make some mistakes, even though it may have negative results for other people.</p>

<p>bump?</p>

<p>Is it that bad? ;p</p>

<p>I would say 10-11. Good structure, length, and examples, but there are more than 1 glaring grammatical errors. Also, i would say that your intro and conclusion are generic and unspecific.</p>

<p>Please grade my essay, I will post it on Tuesday.</p>

<p>Sure thing. If I don’t see it on the forum, I’ll mail you for a link!
And thanks for grading!</p>