<p>This is my first DBQ and i don't know if this will be an acceptable thesis. Be honest and your comments will be greatly appreciated. Thank you.</p>
<p>Between 500 and 1400 in Europe, there were many changes and multiple advancements occurred. Each of the given documents describe the Dark Ages, the Age of Feudalism, or The Golden Age.</p>
<p>As a general rule, a thesis shouldn’t use words like “there were many” or “there are a number” - it should aim to briefly summarize what those changes WERE. So you might say </p>
<p>“Between the years 500 and 1400 CE in Europe, changes were seen in the consolidation of political power, the role of women, and the acceptance of foreign technology.”</p>
<p>Of course, I just made all of that up, but all the same it’s a good idea to aim for that level of specificity.</p>
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Exactly what he said.</p>
<p>Your thesis does’t say very much right now. It needs to give some idea of what you will be discussing in the essay.</p>
<p>Describe the changes and the advancements, instead of just ‘many’ and ‘multiple’. Specificity is key in a thesis.</p>
<p>Yes, I agree with the other responses. You may want to be more specific on what the changes are. Every DBQ is so different though, so there’s no one way to write DBQ theses. I took AP World last year, and I think the DBQ has the hardest thesis to write, just because it is so unpredictable. I guess the only things you know you need to do are Answer the Prompt (A.P.) and be specific. Change/Continuity Over Time and Comparative theses are much easier in my opinion.</p>