Grade my essay please

<p>i just recently did my SAT the prompt was does progress solve problems or does it solves old problems and lead to new ones?</p>

<p>I said yes because if you have progress you can solve any problem that comes your in the Future or life.(Thesis's Statement )</p>

<p>Ex 1 John d Rockefeller and the progress of the train and how it solve issues of transportation
Ex 2 MLK his progression of pusuiting equal rights for african american and how he solved issues of racism
EX 3 Bill gates and his progression of the computer and the tecnology outburst and how it solved issues of communication,organization and something else </p>

<p>Con : Therefore in my examples i have used have proven the effects of progress and how it solves issues of any kind. i t was longer but i forgot</p>

<p>SO what would my essay score be?</p>

<p>You can’t determine an essay score from three points. Those are decent points, but if you had terrible form, execution, and/or explanations your score could be horrific. Just saying.</p>

<p>it’s all in the writing and not the ideas. Looking at the prompt, I’d do these:
progess=bad

  • Farenheit 451 dystopia
  • The Great Gatsby, Roaring Twenties
  • WikiLeaks endangering lives</p>

<p>remember to analyze and bring your examples back to the question and answer it again and again and again.</p>

<p>^Did you come up with that on the spot?! Impressive. :P</p>

<p>My form was in paragraphs and i think i had good exution</p>

<p>yeah, on the spot, though I do remember writing a progress essay back in January or something :stuck_out_tongue: I only used 2 examples until about 3 weeks before my last SAT. Using 3 lets you take up more room and seem more convincing.</p>

<p>@OP (theword)
You can PM me your essay and I’ll grade it and give suggestions if you’d like. (12 essay 80 MC on March 2012 administration)</p>

<p>Yeah but the problem w/ using 3 paragraphs is that some people don’t develop their paragraphs fully enough. It ends up being really rushed and unconvincing. If you spend your time on only 2, you can delve deeper into your points.</p>

<p>It’s like a B in AP (not very developed 3 paragraphs) v.s. A in on-level (well developed 2 paragraphs). You want an A in AP. You want a developed essay with 3 paragraphs.</p>

<p>If you can develop 3 paragraphs fully, then by all means, do it. But it’s pretty difficult for most people to be able to put enough detail in each paragraph.</p>