Grade my essay please!

<p>So its in picture format, im terribly sorry but I tend to write my essays on paper since its a more realistic environmental setting. Anyway, I'd greatly appreciate any criticism, help, and of course, a score!</p>

<p><a href="http://i.**********/Lfii8go.jpg%5B/url%5D"&gt;http://i.**********/Lfii8go.jpg&lt;/a>
<a href="http://i.**********/jt5nsVQ.jpg%5B/url%5D"&gt;http://i.**********/jt5nsVQ.jpg&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p>

<p>The second picture doesnt seem to be great quality, but its great resolution so you can easily zoom in and read fine, thank you!</p>