grade my essay that may be rescored

<p>I'm contemplating getting it rescored. Lets see what others think. I know there are a few gramatical mistakes, but this is the actual essay I wrote for the May topic : How does work school and other activities shape a person's interactions with others.</p>

<p>Wake up, get dressed, have a cup of coffee, and leave for the office. This routine may sound familiar to many Americans. Our culture has become so centered around the workplace, school, and other activities. These places all shape individuals into how they act and behave socially. Life long relationships often begin in the place a person spends most of his or her life.<br>
One example of how the workplace has shaped a relationship is my grandfather. My grandfather was drafted into the Army at the tender age of eighteen. He never could have guessed what a great experience lied before him. His whole life became centered around the army, and fighting for America. Through his stint in the army, he has made many friends he still speaks with today. His best friend actually saved his life during The Battle of the Bulge. His friend George carried him off the battlefield after he was hit by shrapnel from a German artillery shell. After that incident, George and my grandfather became so close that my father calls him Uncle George. My grandfather still walks with a limp, but he says it was well worth the injury to have met people like George. He has told me if there was ever another draft, he would be the first to go.
Another more malevolent example of how the workplace can shape social interaction can be seen in James Thurber’s short story The Catbird Seat. In this story, the star employee of F+S, Mr. Martin, has become extremely fixated on his daily routine. When a new employee, Mrs. Barrows, is hired, she tries to get in the way of Mr. Martin’s routine by ordering changes around his office. Mr. Martin becomes so enraged that Mrs. Barrows disrupted his routine, that he goes as far to try to murder her. This example clearly shows how important work has become in one’s daily routine.
Although the workplace may shape endless friendships, it can also cause acrimonious dissensions. However, it is clear that indeed the workplace shapes a person’s interactions with one another. My grandfather and James Thurber’s The Catbird Seat prove the powerful effects the workplace can have on one’s social interactions.</p>

<p>Collegeboard no longer rescores essays</p>

<p>9-11
You could have a mean guy(9), one nice guys(11), or two medium guys(10).</p>

<p>I put it in the range of 7-9</p>

<p>id say 8 or 9</p>

<p>they no longer rescore essays? interesting...</p>

<p>they do.. i called them.. $50</p>

<p>What score did you get on your essay? I agree with berry's range of 7-9. It's not a horrible essay, but I can't see it going up much more than a point overall. I don't think it's particularly worth it: judging from some of the scores here, it seems that the multiple choice questions affect the overall score the most. If a 10 or 20 point at most overall change (it can also go down from my understanding) is worth the money for you, then go ahead. If I were you, I'd probably work on my writing and then retake the test early next school year.</p>

<p>I say 6-10 so probably a 8</p>

<p>Are you sure its $50?</p>

<p>That's more then the test itself!</p>

<p>Yeah it is $50 which is rediculous. It can't cost them more to regrade it than it did to give you the test and grade the entire thing. Considering college board is supposed to be non profit, that is bs. Anyway, I got a 9. I thought I deserved a 10. I got 4 mc wrong and a 9 essay which gave me a 690. I was shooting for 2100 and came 20 points short. I figured if I had it rescored and got a 10 I may get the 2100. Either way, I got screwed over on the MC that 4 wrong is 69 subscore. I think math experimental had the worst curve for writing.</p>

<p>Any suggestions for next time to hopefully raise my essay? I'm taking the June one.</p>

<p>I think your essay could have been scored lower because they were looking for a more conventional answer than your grandfather battling in war...which isn't the common job.</p>

<p>I made it up to be honest. But the truth of the matter is I made it up in order to support the point that relationships are shaped in the workplace. It shouldn't matter what the example is as long as it supports your thesis well (at least according to their guidlines).</p>