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<p>Assignment: How important it is to seek the opinions of others when making significant personal decision?</p>

<p>When encountering a dilemma, people’s instincts are often to ask for others’ opinion or assistant. To those, having various kinds of perspective might help them make more objective and perhaps, correct choices. Nonetheless, many great men thrive because they trust their own inner voice, regardless of how others think. The archetypes of Steve Jobs and Wen-Kai Tsai will clearly illustrate how crucial it is to believe in one’s own opinion.</p>

<p>One of the greatest entrepreneurs of the 21st century, Steve Jobs’ rough path led him to his great success because he listened to his own voice. Steve Jobs dropped out and skipped classes during college merely because he disliked the courses. Not even considering what his parents and friends told him, to study really hard in college, he chose courses that he was interested in, and these skills he learnt not from his major, actually prompted him to make Apple stand out with functional surfaces. Regardless of others’ opinions, Steve Jobs believes in his own heart that he wasn’t going to waster the precious time on something her did not bother. Although Jobs’ action is not common, even unacceptable among most people, he succeeded. He did because he did not take others’ advice into consideration.</p>

<p>A situation that parallels Steve Jobs is another man who decided to follow his instinct and achieved his dreams. The man is Wen-Kai Tsai, who gave up on high-paid jobs and exclusively high position, and chose to establish a meat bun shop. To the majority, Tsai’s behavior is considered foolish, and no one gave Tsai encouragement or even supported him with his all-time dream, which is to create the most delicious buns in Taiwan. Eventually, Tsai’s perseverance resulted in his chained meat bun shop, which is currently the most famous one in Taiwan. Tsai’s insistence on accomplishing his dreams was a courageous act because he worked against everyone’s expectation and opinions. His dream wasn’t a common or ordinary one, so he had to follow his own voice in order to succeed, and he did, without caring how others mock and ridicule him at the beginning.</p>

<p>In summation, the vital factor to success is not having what others’ think as one’s backup, but to whole-heartedly believe that one’s instinct to accomplish his/her dream is true. Trusting oneself is the only method to success.</p>

<p>Thank you! :)</p>

<p>This is a very formulaic essay. It’s not bad…just formulaic.</p>

<p>In every main category we use to read these, this paper gets a four.</p>

<p>Therefore, the paper is a four.</p>

<p>@jkjeremy could you tell me the difference between a four and a five or six?</p>

<p>Here’s a very brief version:</p>

<p>3
FLAWED</p>

<p>4
COMPETENT but BORING or FORCED
CONTRIVED
SNEAKY</p>

<p>5
SKILLED and mostly INSIGHTFUL</p>

<p>6
ARTFUL though NOT PERFECT
SINCERE, ARTICULATE, and ORIGINAL</p>