Grade My SAT Essay Please :)

<p>Technology promises to make our lives easier, freeing up time for leisure pursuits. But the rapid pace of technological innovation and the split second processing capabilities of computers that can work virtually nonstop have made all of us feel rushed. We have adopted the relentless pace of the very machines that were supposed to simplify our lives, with the result that, whether at work or play people do not feel like their lives have changed for the better.</p>

<p>Assignment:
Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>Essay:
Change is inevitable no matter the circumstance. One can't escape changes in his life unless he lives in a complete standstill. And changes that make life easier do not necessarily have to be as drastic as the invention of high-speed internet. They can be as simple as investing in a new household appliance to a new form of transportation. Life easing changes, though sometimes hard to adjust to, generally bring happiness to people.
Small changes riddle our lives. When my family and I moved to Nashville from Philadelphia, we invested in an electric fireplace. Unlike our old wood-burning one, it could be turned on with a simple flick of a switch. No longer did my family have to manually chop down wood and risk burning down the house everytime we started a fire. This simple change in fireplaces made our lives easier and better, as we moved our worries elsewhere.
When European colonists first migrated over to the New World, they brought with them horses--animals the Natives had never seen before. This was a drastic change for them, and every bit of it improved their lives. Plains Indians now could hunt more efficiently to provide for their families. Their teepees were very portable and could easily be moved to follow buffalo herds on horseback. This change not only made their lives a lot easier, but it bettered their communities w/new energy, food, and symbolic references.
Though change, whether buying an electric fireplace or being introduced to horses, gives people doubts at first, it is generally more beneficial to their lives. In a world where there are many things to worry about, such as the homeless and war striken, life easing changes should be not only welcomed, but encouraged.</p>

<p>4/6</p>

<p>Your examples are on the simpler side and would benefit from more development.</p>

<p>The graders base on initial impressions. If it’s two pages, thesis as the first sentence, five paragraphs, introduction, body, and conclusion, you have at least a 5/6. Also, don’t provide a counter argument. In an academic paper, then yes, they like to see counter arguments, but since they’re grading on first impressions, they might think you aren’t really taking a viewpoint on the issue.</p>