<p>Hey guys,
I had the fame topic on the SAT.
Here is approximately what I wrote for my essay.
Please give me your guess on what I'd receive, thank you!</p>
<pre><code> Many people believe that fame will bring happiness, however, this is not the case. If someone is famous, that person must face constant recognition and rumors spread about him or her. Two examples to support this are two current celebrities Jessica Simpson and Brittney Spears.
The first, Jessica Simpson, is a famous and popular singer. Superficially, she seems happy; she has a plethora of wealth and is generally well-liked. However, in a recent issue of people magazine, she was asked if she could have one superpower, what would it be? In response, she asserted that she could have invisibility, so that she could go grocery shopping without someone asking for an autograph, paparrazzi with cameras taking pictures of her, or people spreading rumors. This shows that Simpson's fame prevents her from doing basic things, such as even grocery shopping, and prevents her from attaining true happiness.
The second example, Brittney Spears, is another prominent and respected singer. However, it is her fame that leads to her ultimate demise. Recently, she made the decision to shave her head. If she were not famous, no one would have cared. However, countless newspapers, internet news, and other such media reported on her inane decision and denounced her as "crazy" or "mentally ill". Spears' fame caused her reputation to be damaged after making an unusual decision, causing her to feel unhappy.
Overall, fame does not lead to happiness. Someone famous will have a hard time enjoying the simple pleasures in life that ordinary people can. As seen in the aforementioned examples, Jessica Simpson could go grocery shopping and Brittney Spears would not have become denounced as insane.
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<p>I'm sorry, but the lack of literature could be very bad for your score. Using two pop celebritys isn't generally the best idea.</p>
<p>^^^i was afraid of that
what do you think i would get?</p>
<p>I give you a 3 and 4 so a 7 overall, I got personal during mine like mentioning the importance of dedicating time to family</p>
<p>haha crap
anymore thoughts?</p>
<p>no its not that bad- id say probably an 8 or 9- its not that the examples are bad its just not a really strong essay that would give it that 10+</p>
<p>7 or 8 maybe</p>
<p>frankly, your essay is wrought with grammatical errors and misuse of certain words. "Plethora of wealth" and "such as even grocery shopping" for example are fairly awkward. Also "she was asked if she could have one superpower" would be better worded "she was asked, 'if you could have one superpower...'" or "when asked what superpower she would most like to have...".</p>
<p>I suggest practicing more writing mc, which will automatically improve your essays. I also suggest reading at least 2 or 3 moderately difficult books before the end of the summer. 1984 by Orwell is one of my favorites and is a really good read as is Flowers for Algernon. Any decent book up till 1975 will probably help your writing. You basically want to read books written for the general public and not those written just for teens. The former will have the high-level, mature writing that will greatly increase your essay writing ability.</p>
<p>Your writing style strikes me as rather awkward. As some poster above mentioned, I would try reading literature popularly known for its eloquence and prose, and try to learn how to write from that.</p>
<p>I don't know how long the essay would look handwritten, but it also seems to be rather short.</p>
<p>it was two full pages</p>
<p>I would say a 3 or a 4 from each grader. I can see your point, but I don't think your essay is strong enough. It would have been a lot better if you could summon a literature example.</p>
<p>I think while yes you answered the question and you were on topic it was a bit mundane. Also as people have said either a personal experience or an example that is historical of literary would help. As for getting 10+s on the essays i think that a lot of it comes down to voice and vocabulary and you essay didn't have much voice or vocab that gave it a "wow" factor.
I would think it was a 7-8</p>
<p>I believe you will receive an 8. I think your Jessica Simpson example worked very well. However, your support for Britney was a bit weak. Readers are going to be deluged with Britney examples. They are only going to reward the best. I think you would have been better off by using Marilyn Monroe and Jessica Simpson. That would have given you a potentially very nice comparison to work with. Good luck!</p>
<p>I don't know. I didn't use any literature on the May SAT (topic was about benefits of not using technology) and I got a 9. Granted, it was a different topic. But don't necessasarily count yourself out from >8. I don't think the readers would judge you on your use of examples as long as they work for your arguement.</p>
<p>I ended up a getting a 9 on this.</p>
<p>That was 2 pages? You received a 9?</p>
<p>Damn...</p>