HELP edit essay for EA

[thisisanalias]

<p>I applying EA, and I need some critique (if it is cliche or not, etc.) and grammar and word usage editing for my essay. Any takers?</p>

[Dip]

<p>PM. give it my best</p>

[frenchdude]

<p>i'll read it!</p>

[JDorian]

<p>Sure PM me.</p>

[LJ1000F]

<p>Sure, pm me</p>