Help fleshing out my essay

Hey guys! So I’m an international student and my essay will definitely be about cooking either option 1 or 2. I’m currently working on an essay about how I failed at cooking a particular food (don’t want to give too many deats) but I feel like I can do better. Any assistance would be great about what ideas I should include. I also have a rough draft if anyone wants to read. Thanks in advance.

ill read!