Help me correct UCI appeal letter

<p>To Whom It May Concern:</p>

<p>I am writing this letter to appeal the admissions committee’s decision in rejecting my transfer admission to University of California, Irvine.</p>

<p>I recently received a letter in the mail after I was rejected from UC Irvine stating that my application became inactive due to a lack of response for further requests. However, when UCI requested a high school transcript from me on February 16th, I immediately called my high school, and received a confirmation over the phone from the records office that the transcript was put in the mailbox that same day. Enclosed with the supporting documents is a copy of a message thread that my counselor and I have been communicating through, and my counselor wrote me back on March 21st stating that my high school transcript has been received. (I do realize that the date is more than a month later than the request date, but the message sent by the counselor was regarding another issue. I am absolutely sure that the transcript was received by UCI a few days after the date it was requested back in February.) Other than the request for a high school transcript, my FAFSA was submitted on time (document enclosed,) and I did not receive any other further requests by UCI. I have been very careful about my application due to my willingness to attend UCI, and if there were any requests sent out to me, I would have complied immediately.</p>

<p>I also realize that I am one English course short in completing the UC requirements. But when another UC guaranteed my admission back in January, I was more than reassured that my requirements were satisfied (document enclosed.) In March when the school turned around and denied me, I called the school to settle the confusion, and that was when I realized my lack of a requirement. I wrote my counselor after I got rejected asking if the English class was the reason for my denial, and her answer was no. I ask that UCI is able to consider my abilities and performances in spite of a lacking English class, given that I have registered to take English 1B this summer.</p>

<p>I was raised in three different cultures, am fluent in three languages, and am currently learning two more. During my four years in high school, I lived on my own while my parents were working in a foreign country. It was a bit tough, but starting at the age of sixteen I learned how to deal with budgeting, loneliness, and basic skills to survive the real adult world. In the end I am proud to say that not only am I much more responsible than I used to be, but also more mature than my peers. After moving around thirty-plus times with my family and on my own, my feet were itching to leave Redlands after having been glued down for four years and to go explore the big East Coast. At Northeastern University in Boston, I finished a 300+ hours commitment and recruited a goal-exceeding 160 volunteers throughout the year for Jumpstart while serving the local low-income preschool children to improve classroom performance and literacy skills. I also was able to earn a 3.2 GPA while pursuing my passion as an International Affairs major student, and this summer on May 18th, I will be heading to Japan to attend an intense summer school language program with Northeastern hoping to become more fluent in Japanese and eventually add it to my language collection.</p>

<p>I have been dreaming of attending UCI since I submitted the application back in November of 2008. During my stay at Northeastern, I realized that I truly belong in Southern California and my intense desire for stability was awaiting me there. Missing California gave me comfort in the thought that I finally found a place to call ‘home.’ After research, I found my other half- UCI- where I am able to pursue my passions in global affairs on a broader scale. An East Asian Studies course I took made me realize my passion to pursue a minor or even a double major in this field. However, being a relatively new subject, there was not much of a variety in terms of classes offered in the East Asian field at Northeastern, especially regarding Korea. My biggest desire is to attend UCI and take advantage of the courses offered in this field, such as an interdisciplinary minor in East Asian Studies and taking classes that are offered related to Korean history, society, and literature offered by the Department East Asian Language and Literature, while continuing my studies as an international affairs major. Being able to become a part of the UCI community will become the highlight of my life, and if I am admitted, I know that my choice to transfer to UCI will definitely become one of the best choices I have made until now. </p>

<p>Enclosed in the packet is an appeal cover sheet, an official Northeastern University transcript, a copy of the letter stating my application was closed, a receipt for my FAFSA submitted on time, the admission guarantee email from UCR, and the message threads between the admissions counselors and I. And because of the reasons stated above, I sincerely ask that the committee reevaluate my application and accept me into the UCI community.</p>

<p>I also realize that I am one English course short in completing the UC requirements(, however,) when another UC guaranteed my admission back in January, I was more than reassured that my requirements were satisfied (document enclosed.) In March when the school turned around and denied me, I called the school to settle the confusion, and that was when I realized my lack of a requirement. I wrote my counselor after I got rejected asking if the English class was the reason for my denial, and her answer was no. (I ask UCI to reconsider) my abilities and performances in spite of a lacking English class, given that I have registered to take English 1B this summer.</p>

<p>or you can say something like–“I hope that UCI will reconsider my abilities and performances in spite of the lacking English requirement, given that I have registered to take English 1B this summer.”</p>

<p>thanks appreciate it</p>

<p>please let me know if i need to cut out useless stuff.</p>