help please!! how can i improve that essay ?

“There’s no success like failure.”
What is your view on the idea that success can begin with failure? In an essay, support your position using an example (or examples) from literature, the arts, history, current events, politics, science and technology, or from your personal experience or observation.

my teacher gave me a score of 8 and no advices to improve my essay… can you re-evaluate my essay?

What does not break us strengths us. Someday a lair stated that the failure is an end. Actually, failure is a blocked way that guides us to the right way, because a person cannot distinguish the difference between the right and the wrong without trying both of them. What would the white be if it is not the opposite of the black? In the same way, no one can achieve success without lacking it: or in other words, no one can achieve success without overcoming failures.
Thomas Edison’s 100 failures, Bill Wilson’s bankrupting show that Yes, failure is only a beginning.
He once said that “I did not fail, I just have found 100 unsuccessful ways” Thomas Edison experienced 100 failures before he found out how to make a bulb. His failures made him not only a great scientist but also a symbol of hard-working and determination. And he was awarded for lightening the world with that every year in his birth day and in his country, the light is turned off to remember how the world had been without his great invent. This fact shows that failure is a start that can end with a great success.
Bill Wilson bankrupted because of alcoholism. He turned his failure into success by developing the 12 steps system to give up drinking. He did not only help himself but he also helped hundreds of alcohol addicts to recover. Without his failure, Bill would not achieve his great success, because why would he think to solve a problem that did not exist.
Concluding my thoughts, failure is not only a beginning but sometimes also a reason to success. God’s great plan cannot be understood without opposites such as light and dark, winning and losing, right and wrong and also success and failure. In my opinion, failure is only a step in the stair of success.

This essay has a lot of grammatical, spelling, and style errors. I’m surprised your teacher didn’t catch them at all. I should become an English teacher…

Spelling:
“break us strengths us” should be “break us strengthens”
“Someday a lair” should be “Someday a liar”
“lightening” should be “lighting”
“his great invent” should be “his great invention”

There are so many grammatical and style errors in the rest of the essay that I’m just going to talk about the introductory paragraph and the second paragraph. I trust that you can find the rest of them, or find a mentor that can help you.

Intro paragraph:
You unnecessarily restate the same idea over and over again in the first paragraph. You can shorten the entire first paragraph to “What doesn’t break us strengthens us, but one can achieve success without failure.” That’s it! One sentence!

Second paragraph:
Thomas Edison once said, “I have not failed. I’ve just found 10000 ways that won’t work.” However, these 10000 “failures” led Edison to develop the world’s first long lasting filament bulb. His failures led directly to his success. Now, as a reward for lighting the world, every year on his birthday in his birth country, lights are turned off to remember how life was like without his great invention."