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<p>USC
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Describe your academic interests and how you plan to pursue them at USC. Please feel free to address your first- and second-choice major selections.</p>

<p>At USC, I want to major in Gerontology for the Health Science Track. This major is perfect for me because not only will it prepare me for medical school, but USC’s Gerontology School is the oldest and largest in the country. When I started volunteering at El Encanto, sure, I liked biology. But when helping the nurses and seniors in that convalescent home, I started to gain an interest in the aging process. I began to wonder how the aging process worked, because when volunteering at the center, I would see the age differences between workers, volunteers, and nurses and the seniors. Then, I found out that USC had a gerontology program that would prepare me for medical school as well. So I visited USC, met Jim deVera and Maria Henke in the USC Davis School of Gerontology, and found out about some research that the professors did. I especially loved the research about the effects of fasting on the effectiveness of chemotherapy. So at USC, I would love to be a part of research like that. I feel that their gerontology program and research are perfect for me.</p>

<p>Vassar
HOW DID YOU LEARN ABOUT VASSAR AND WHAT ASPECTS OF OUR COLLEGE DO YOU FIND APPEALING? 500 characters or upload document</p>

<p>I learned about Vassar from my aunt; as the only one in the family to leave California for college, she told me of her experiences away from home. She knew Vassar because she went to Smith, part of the Seven Sisters. Living in a barely-known province in Rowland Heights, I wanted to go out of state, just like her.
One of the reasons I want to go to Vassar is its location. To me, New York is a symbol of freedom because it offers many opportunities to be independent from my mom who has raised me alone since second grade. I also love the setting of Vassar. When I looked at the online campus tour, I was entranced by how beautiful the school is. As someone who has always loved nature and adventure, I know I would enjoy living in Poughkeepsie surrounded by trees and right next to the Hudson River. (For the last several years I have been looking for a body of water nearby to play in with my friends, but could not find one. So living on a campus with the Hudson River running right through it is ideal!) In addition, I love how the school’s buildings have reminiscent styles. I know I will love living in such buildings. Plus, with campus security, I can feel safe living there.
In addition, I like the education provided by Vassar. Vassar has small class sizes so that I will not have to feel too intimidated when participating in class. I find that it would be very hard if I had to raise my hand in a class with 100 students to ask my question. Sixty-Seven percent of Vassar’s classes have fewer than 20 students, so I would find it much easier to develop a relationship with my professor. Also, I like how Vassar does not have a core curriculum. This kind of freedom appeals to me because it fosters broader thinking, which I believe can lead to new medical discoveries. On September 27, 1928, it was realistic to use antiseptics to treat wounds, even though it usually could do more harm than good. But the next day, Alexander Fleming accidentally discovered penicillin, and those antiseptics were outdated. As someone aspiring towards work in the medical field, I believe that something this monumental can be achieved with just a simple redefinition of what’s possible.
Vassar is the perfect college for me because it is located in the beautiful Hudson Valley (which can provide me with many adventures) and its flexibility can bring me to the best of my capabilities. </p>

<p>University of Rochester
In 125 words or less, please answer the following questions.
Why Rochester? - The University of Rochester is one of two universities listed by The Carnegie Foundation for the Advancement of Teaching as arts-and-science focused, medium-sized, and highly residential, with comprehensive PhD programs, medical schools, and very high research activity. Both offer undergraduates an unusual degree of freedom in their curriculum. Which of these characteristics (or others) are leading you to apply to Rochester?</p>

<p>I’ve always wanted to travel to New York. It’s actually on my bucket list of places-to-be. As someone who loves nature and adventure I love the fact that Rochester is right next to the Genesee River. (For the past several years my friends and I thoroughly explored our small town Rowland Heights, but unfortunately we still haven’t found a body of water nearby enough to be our new favorite place.) Plus, I get to enjoy the suburb of the college with the option of a city life nearby. I also know I will be more comfortable in Rochester’s small classes. This way, I can more easily build relationships with my professors and classmates. In addition, the Take Five Scholars program and no required subjects will let me broaden my interests and bring me to my fullest capability. I believe the broad thinking that these qualities foster can lead to many medical discoveries in the future.</p>

<p>Meliora: ''Ever better'' - The University's motto directs our focus toward continual improvement through learning, discovery, creativity, and enterprising collaborations among people with different points of view. Describe a ''Meliora'' experience from your life.</p>

<p>In 8th grade, my principal told me my goal of a perfect 600 on the STAR tests was “unrealistic.” Her remark disheartened me all day, but that year I proved her wrong. In middle school, I was just a mediocre student, but my 600 boosted my confidence. I resolved to try harder and challenge myself with the IB program. I knew that the only limits were those set by me. Because of my principal’s comment, I realized I could do better, worked harder, and found more joy in learning. I still remember the words my principal said to me four years ago. But now that I think back, I know that I was, in fact, being realistic. </p>

<p>Johns Hopkins
Write a brief essay (250 words maximum each question) in which you respond to the following questions. (freshman applicants only):
1. Johns Hopkins offers 50 majors across the schools of Arts and Sciences and Engineering. On this application, we ask you to identify one or two that you might like to pursue here. Why did you choose the way you did? If you are undecided, why didn't you choose? (If any past courses or academic experiences influenced your decision, you may include them in your essay.)</p>

<p>Of all the majors offered at Johns Hopkins, the two I would like to pursue the most are biology and pre-medicine. I want to major in biology, with a background in pre-medicine so that I can become a doctor. One reason I picked these majors is that in my biology classes at school (Honors in 9th, and IB in 11th), I have done well, and passed each semester with one of the highest grades in the class. I have always enjoyed biology as far as I can remember; even as a child I loved watching the animal channel or national geographic, and loved anything related to nature. As I grew older, this love expanded to include biology as learned in school, hence the biology part of my major. I feel that it’s perfect that I love biology, a subject that goes hand in hand with the medicine field. As for why I picked pre-medicine, it probably has to do with how my parents divorced. My father has been physically and financially absent from my life for over the last decade, and even made a few threatening calls to my mom and I. At a young age, with my mom always busy working to support us, I was forced to become self-sufficient. As a result, I want to be someone who contributes to strengthening children and their families. I believe this has influenced my choice to pursue medicine. Being a family doctor helps to nurture children in their development and can ensure that parents are alive and well to take care of their children. I feel that being a doctor is the only profession that would allow me such direct access to both generations of a family. I am drawn to medicine as a helping field, one that connects people with doctors willing and able to provide the support, care, and the treatment they need. I look forward to a future where I may be a positive force in the strengthening of individuals, children, and families in my care.</p>

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<li>Tell us something about yourself or your interests that we wouldn't learn by looking at the rest of your application materials. (While you should still pay attention to sentence structure and grammar, your response is meant as a way for us to get to know you, rather than a formal essay.)</li>
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<p>I come from a tiny community called Rowland Heights. If you haven’t heard of it, it’s because the only thing that Rowland Heights is really known for is Bloomberg’s naming it the #1 Place in CA to Raise Children. I can vouch for that; I absolutely love it here. I think something not everyone knows about me is that, even though on the surface people perceive me to be calm, composed, and studious, I am secretly an adventurer. Since I love to travel, but cannot afford the expense, my friends and I “travel” on mini adventures all over Rowland Heights. As a result, we know where all the good food is. One of the things I love about home is that everywhere you turn there are Asian bakeries, sushi bars, buffets; basically there is food everywhere. My favorite place to be is Dolphin Bay, a boba shop on Colima Road. Many of my favorite memories have happened there and it’s like a second home.
I also have some guilty pleasures; I like letting my inner girly girl out watching America’s Next Top Model (ANTM) and Glee - I have watched nearly all of the episodes for both. After a long day of school and tennis practice, my friend Athena (a fellow ANTM watcher) and I “tooch” and “smize” along with Tyra Banks and roll our eyes at the drama on the show. Amanda watches Glee with me, and we love to sing along with the new character Marley, whose voice is oh-so-heavenly. At Johns Hopkins, I am definitely looking forward to meeting new friends, starting with my roommate. Food scouting is also on the list! I hope that in the next four years I’ll find our own version of Dolphin Bay-I’ll create new memories and all the servers will know my “usual.” Most of all, I am eager to find my independence!</p>

<p>Pepperdine
Please respond to the following question (50 words or less).
If you were to write a book about your life, what would be the title?</p>

<p>The title would be “Intents and Purposes”, inspired by this quote from the movie 500 Days of Summer. “Height: average. Weight, average. Shoe size, slightly [below] average. For all intents and purposes - just another girl. Except she wasn’t.” I feel like it describes me (and the movie’s Summer) well.</p>

<p>Please respond to the following question (500 words or less):
Pepperdine University is a Christian university committed to the highest standards of academic excellence and Christian values, where students are strengthened for lives of purpose, service, and leadership. How are you prepared to contribute to Pepperdine's mission and community of faith, learning, and service?</p>

<p>For the past 7 years I have not gone to a stable church because whenever I finally settled in one, someone would discriminate against my mom about being a single mother. So she stopped going to church, and, she being my ride, so did I. I hope that at Pepperdine, where everyone in the church would be connected both by the school and by faith, I can be a part of a stable Christian family where I would not have to stop going to due to discrimination.
At Pepperdine, I hope to study biology on a pre-medicine track. Through high school, I have developed an interest in becoming a doctor. This is because of many reasons. One reason is that my father has been physically and financially absent from my life; therefore family values matter to me. I feel that being a doctor is the only profession that allows me direct access to the many generations of a family to help them. Another reason is that since I babysitted my younger cousins for many years, my love for them translated into a love for children in general, and want to help them in any way I can. This is why I want to study biology - so that I get a good foundation for my future career while studying a subject I love.
Sophomore year, my friend and I founded a service club in our school called Leo Club. Leo Club is the school club version of the world’s largest international service club, Lions Club. By being the club’s co-president, I learned the leadership skills necessary to gather and lead a group of people in Leo Club’s mission of Leadership, Experience, and Opportunity: the club’s acronym. I want to take my experience in my high school’s Leo Club and expand on it in Pepperdine’s campus. I am ready to lead and gather more people to help our community (perhaps through a Lions Club on campus.)</p>

<p>Pitzer
Pitzer College's educational foundation is built upon five core values: social responsibility, intercultural understanding, interdisciplinary learning, student engagement and environmental sustainability. Our students utilize these values to create solutions to our world's current and future challenges, both big and small. Keeping our core values in mind, please answer one of the following prompts (Maximum of 4000 characters).</p>

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<li>Tell us about an accomplishment of yours. How did you use one or more of our core values to reach your goal?</li>
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<p>One accomplishment of mine is the Leo Club of Rowland High School, of which I have been co-founder and co-president for the last two years. Leo Club is the high school version of Lions Club, the world’s largest international service club. Through this club, I became more engaged as a student. The first step in creating a club requires AAAAA amount of signatures from the student body. For this, I had to convince the students in my classes that our school could benefit from a Leo Club, and that this club was distinct from any other club on campus. This forced me to engage with the students in a less formal form of advocating speaking. Once Leo Club was approved, I then had to engage myself with the rest of the community. Leo Club started with small events such as a fundraising concert, a school clean up, and other community service events. Then, we engaged ourselves with more global issues such as North Korea’s situation and the Operation Smile cause. Through being engaged with more than what directly influences me, I gained leadership skills and learned the joy of helping. It feels good to know that I have made an impact, whether small or large, in my community and my world. Sometimes I used to feel really insignificant in this world, there being 7 billion people and me being only one. But I realized that one seemingly small thing, me, can actually make an impact. Just like one dose of a cure can heal illness, one person can actually make a difference. And through engaging myself, I can confidently say that I do make a difference. In the future, I hope that my actions will benefit my world, even if that action is just prescribing medicine to a child.</p>