<p>My friend says my essay is good and witty but my English teacher thinks it shows the wrong side of me to colleges. I wrote about how proud I was of my intellectual abilities when I was little and how I thought I was perfect. I then progress into the first time I realized that I was not perfect and how that let me learn the value of work ethic and connecting with my peers. My teacher says colleges might view me as an a-hole and that I should write something that shows me in better light. On the other I think the essay is well written and shows my development, but my earlier self does indeed sound like an a-hole. What should I do? Scrap the whole thing?</p>
<p>If you add in a few sentences to show that you are aware that past-you was aloof, you should be fine.</p>
<p>Just end the essay in a humble way and write ur thoughts.
I think it’s a good essay cuz it’s the real u and don’t worry about anything else</p>